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Some people believe computers will take the teacher’s role, therefore, teachers will be replaced by computers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe computers will take the teacher’s role, therefore, teachers will be replaced by computers. v. 2
Computers have contributed to various aspects of our society, teaching in particular, they are even believed to replace teachers in the classroom. Although computer programs are of great importance to engage students in the lessons, I would argue that teacher’s role is the key to the student’s success. A multitude of electronic applications provide teachers with different teaching ideas, which aim to attract learner’s attention. The first benefit gained from using computers in the classroom is enhancing teacher’s lessons. This add-on materials make the class more interesting and lively compared to the traditional methods of teaching with a white board. Moreover, thanks to the Internet, students can do online homework and search online resources for their assignments. Google search engine is the best example for its utility which all students use daily for reference. On the other hand, the teacher’s presence at class is vital because teaching is not only about knowledge but about making students well-rounded; that is what computers cannot do. It is true that face-to-face communication in the classroom is needed as teachers know how to deal with any occurrence happening. Also, teachers can apply their own method for the class with mix level while computers use one technique for all. Furthermore, students require more than just knowledge, so teachers are the ones who share their own experience and provide students with basic skills for their future jobs. To sum up, it is irrefutable that computers play an integral part of enhancing teaching style; however, I believe they cannot be a replacement for teachers in the classroom for all the reasons presented above.
Computers have contributed to various aspects of our society,
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teaching
in particular
, they are even believed to replace
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teachers
in the classroom. Although computer programs are of great importance to engage
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students
in the lessons, I would argue that
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teacher’s
role is the key to the
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student’s
success.

A multitude of electronic applications provide
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teachers
with
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different
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teaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
, which aim to attract learner’s attention. The
first
benefit gained from using computers in the classroom is enhancing
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teacher’s
lessons. This
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add
-on materials
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make
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
more interesting and lively compared to the traditional methods of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
with a white board.
Moreover
, thanks to the Internet,
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students
can do online homework and search online resources for their assignments. Google search engine is the best example for its utility which all
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
daily for reference.

On the other hand
, the
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teacher’s
presence at
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class
is vital
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because
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teaching
is not
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only
about knowledge
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but
about making
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students
well-rounded;
that is
what computers cannot do. It is true that face-to-face communication in the classroom
is needed
as
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teachers
know how to deal with any occurrence happening.
Also
,
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teachers
can apply their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
method for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
with mix level while computers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
one technique for all.
Furthermore
,
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students
require more than
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just
knowledge,
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so
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teachers
are the ones who share their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
experience and provide
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students
with basic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
for their future jobs.

To sum up, it is irrefutable that computers play an integral part of enhancing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
style;
however
, I believe they cannot be a replacement for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
in the classroom for all the reasons presented above.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe computers will take the teacher’s role, therefore, teachers will be replaced by computers. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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