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some people argued that advertisement encourages us to buy the thing we do not need. Some said they inform us about new products which improve our lives. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

some people argued that advertisement encourages us to buy the thing we do not need. Some said they inform us about new products which improve our lives. v. 2
In the present scenario, marketing is an important and diverse tool for selling a product. one of the techniques of doing marketing is advertisement through newspapers, televisions, social media, campaigns, etc. some people argued that advertisement encourages the public to buy things that we really do not need while others said it gives us news about new products that improve our lives. I totally agree with the second statement because every day we see different products and their specifications through advertisements which alert anyone about discounts and offers made by the companies, directly impact on our budget and easy shopping. In one hand, the guidance and understanding provide on the media platforms to sell the products create awareness among the general public but sometimes it is contributing to overbuying. For example, Like we go to supermarkets and departmental stores where a plethora of items have huge discounts and sale offers that demonstrated as a lower in quality many times. Even we don' t put on those things in the shopping list but we got trapped and end up to buying it. This has happened when the material looks attractive and give us a pleasurable form of excitement. On the other hand, the launching of similar products by the number of buyers with advancement and need of customers are informed by the advertisement. To illustrate, the skills used for consuming a product is necessary given by the company, they make us know to how the particular product have their perspectives and consequences, how to be safe and take actions. If this information does not do by the businesses then we are not able to adopt the new things properly and may cause major injuries. Additionally, the rebates, policies, gifts, vouchers, festival offers, fraudulent and complaint numbers are always advertised, help consumers to acquire the right direction before buying. Furthermore, the equal product has differences in terms of quality, measure, price and more features which increase the knowledge of the customer to get beneficial products. In conclusion, I support that advertisement create a new the for buyers. However, it depends upon the consumers buying habits that how much they are eager or patient for purchasing anything. The nature of everyone is different and their habits too and by this, they decide what to buy and what to not which affect the power of purchasing.
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important
and diverse tool for selling a
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product
.
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one
of the techniques of doing marketing is
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advertisement
through newspapers, televisions, social media, campaigns, etc.
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some
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people
argued that
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advertisement
encourages the public to
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buy
things that we
really
do not need
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while
others said it gives us
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news
about
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new
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products
that
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improve
our
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lives
. I
totally
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agree
with the second statement
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because
every day we
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see
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different
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products
and their specifications through
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advertisements
which alert anyone about discounts and offers made by the
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companies
,
directly
impact on our budget and easy shopping.

In one hand, the guidance and understanding provide on the media platforms to sell the
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products
create awareness among the
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general public
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but
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sometimes
it is contributing to overbuying.
For example
, Like we go to supermarkets and departmental stores where a plethora of items have huge discounts and sale offers that demonstrated as a lower in quality
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many
times. Even we
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but
we
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got
trapped and
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end
up to buying it. This has happened when the material looks attractive and give us a pleasurable form of excitement.

On the other hand
, the launching of similar
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products
by the number of buyers with advancement and need of customers
are informed
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
. To illustrate, the
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skills
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used
for consuming a
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product
is necessary
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given
by the
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company
, they
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make
us know to how the particular
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product
have their perspectives and consequences, how to be safe and take actions. If this information does not do by the businesses then we are not able to adopt the
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new
things
properly
and may cause major injuries.
Additionally
, the rebates, policies, gifts, vouchers, festival offers, fraudulent and complaint numbers are always advertised,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
consumers to acquire the right direction
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before
buying.
Furthermore
, the equal
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product
has differences in terms of quality, measure, price and more features which increase the knowledge of the customer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
beneficial products.

In conclusion
, I support that
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advertisement
create a
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new
the for buyers.
However
, it depends upon the consumers buying habits that how much they are eager or patient for purchasing anything. The nature of everyone is
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different
and their habits too and by this, they decide what to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
and what to not which affect the power of purchasing.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people argued that advertisement encourages us to buy the thing we do not need. Some said they inform us about new products which improve our lives. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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