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Some people argue that TV is the most powerful educational tool, while others claim that TV has a negative impact on children's behaviour. Discuss both sides.

Some people argue that TV is the most powerful educational tool, while others claim that TV has a negative impact on children's behaviour. 53BAm
Television has always been popular topic among population throughout the world. On the one hand, most people believe that the most powerful educational tool is television. However, others believe that television has a negative effects on the upbringing of children. This essay will evaluate both views conclusion will be shared. Initially, some argue that TV is an important system in schooling. For example, according to educational reports it is revealed that TV companies should make more positive education programs. It is commonly understood that the programs shown on television can teach children quickly and effectively for free. Thus, the idea of TV is the most powerful educational tool can be supported. In contrast, many believe that TV has a negative effects on children's behaviour. For instance, the American theories of educational argue that the violence on the television with crime rates in the real world. It can be understood from this that children more prone to crime by watching various crime films that are not age appropriate. Thus, the idea that TV has a negative impact on children's behaviour can be encouraged.
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people
believe that the most powerful
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educational
tool is
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television
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television
has a
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negative
effects on the upbringing of children. This essay will evaluate both views conclusion will
be shared
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some
argue that TV is an
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important
system in schooling.
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educational
reports it
is revealed
that TV
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companies
should
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make
more
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positive
education programs. It is
commonly
understood that the programs shown on
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television
can teach children
quickly
and
effectively
for free.
Thus
, the
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idea
of TV is the most powerful
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educational
tool can
be supported
.
In contrast
,
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many
believe that TV has a
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negative
effects on children's
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behaviour
.
For instance
, the American theories of
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educational
argue that the violence on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
television
with crime rates in the real world. It can
be understood
from this that children more prone to crime by watching various crime films that are not age appropriate.
Thus
, the
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idea
that TV has a
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negative
impact on children's
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behaviour
can
be encouraged
.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that TV is the most powerful educational tool, while others claim that TV has a negative impact on children's behaviour.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
182 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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