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Some people argue that technogical gadgets like mobile phone are making individual less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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No one can rebuff the fact that handful of masses argue that technogical gadgets such as mobile phone are making individual less interactive. In this essay I will agree with this given notion discuss about it in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are several reasons how inhabitant become less interactive. First and foremost, with the advancement of technological gadgets such as laptop and mobile phones, with the help of these gadgets, many people do work and they can save their time. To elaborate it, with the help of these inventions, they can work faster than past. For instance, in corona epidemics, many empoyers do work with the help of these gadgets such as mobile phones and learners continue their study with the internet because legislation strictly announced anyone do not go anywhere. As a consequence, they complete their basic needs and students obtain various information about other languages and acquire another skills as how to learn driving skills with watching videos on several applications. Hence, they spend quality of time on these things due to this, they become less interactive. Probing further, there are some causes how inhabitant less interactive. Firstly, many inhabitants a lot of time spend on social media application such as whatsapp and instagram, owing to this fact that, they do chat with their friends as well as watch videos on these applications. As a result, they cannot much concentrate on their study and they play only indoor games than they deprived from their kith and kins as well as they do not learn moral values, how to communicate with other person. Due to majority of time spend on technological gadgets, they can suffer from many health hesseles such as obesity and weak eye-sight. To conclude, although there are manifold benefits of technological inventions such as mobile phones, yet it is repercussion effects cannot be overlooked and people should use these gadgets in limited time.
No one can rebuff the fact that handful of masses
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technogical
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gadgets
such as mobile
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phone
are making individual
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less
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interactive
. In this essay I will
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agree
with this
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notion
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discuss about it
in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are several reasons how inhabitant become
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less
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interactive
.
First
and foremost, with the advancement of technological
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gadgets
such as laptop and mobile
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phones
, with the
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help
of these
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gadgets
,
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many
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people
do
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work and
they can save their
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time
. To elaborate it, with the
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help
of these inventions, they can work faster than past.
For instance
, in corona epidemics,
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many
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empoyers
do work with the
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of these
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such as mobile
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phones
and learners continue their study with the internet
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because
legislation
strictly
announced anyone
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do
not go anywhere. As a consequence, they complete their basic needs and students obtain various information about other languages and acquire another
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skills
as how to learn driving
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skills
with watching videos on several applications.
Hence
, they spend quality of
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time
on these things due to this, they become
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less
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interactive
. Probing
further
, there are
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some
causes how inhabitant
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less
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interactive
.
Firstly
,
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many
inhabitants
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time
spend on social media application such as
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whatsapp
and
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instagram
, owing to this fact that, they do chat with their friends
as well
as
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watch
videos on these applications.
As a result
, they cannot much concentrate on their
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study and
they play
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only
indoor games than they
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deprived from
their kith and
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kins
as well
as they do not learn moral values, how to communicate with other person. Due to
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majority of
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time
spend on technological
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gadgets
, they can suffer from
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many health
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hesseles
such as obesity and weak eye-sight.
To conclude
, although there are manifold benefits of technological inventions such as mobile
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phones
,
yet
it is repercussion effects cannot
be overlooked
and
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people
should
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use
these
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gadgets
in limited
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time
.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that technogical gadgets like mobile phone are making individual less interactive.

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  American English
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320 words
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