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Environment safety is not possible but some think that taken some measure it can be stopped it. Discuss the both view and give you opinion.

Environment safety is not possible but some think that taken some measure it can be stopped it. Discuss the both view and give you opinion. Jq8Ye
Nowadays, human activities have more harmful on environment, and living things. However, they all tasks are totally depend on nature. Few crowds believe that stop these works that not possible on the contrary other people think that taken some action against these occupations if can stop it. I will look at both sides of the argument, and give my opinion. On the one hand, in present time, plethora of NGO, and volunteers are working for stop mankind task that is become further harmful on animals as well as trees. For exam, “Pratham” organisation is work for expand understanding of nation but communities do not grasp about territory, and continually deliver the loss to the domain. Furthermore, these committees are also organized various types of events about the stop a hunting of animal on the contrary this is not possible in light of the fact that most of the folks are non- vegetarian. As a result, they can't stop their eating. However vegetarian foods are not good for their health. One the other hand, abode safety works are doing by the country's authority. If the government makes strict rules, thess all activities can be stopped. For instance, the union should make an rules that if any damage will be done by people should be decided punishment or financial find against them. Moreover, the state should spread awareness about the surrounding, and wildlife. As consequently, the society will be taken care of plant and forest life, and also planting trees around them. To sum up, without nature family cannot live on the earth, and unavailability of creature the community cannot growth in life. People do not understand of volunteers work, and they work increased day by day against creatures. Government should take some measurements against these crowds if can be possible stop it. I believe that nature is additional vital for human hence environment and animal safety is a society's responsibility.
Nowadays, human activities have more harmful on environment, and living things.
However
, they all tasks are
totally
Consider using a past participle here: "depended".
depend
on nature. Few crowds believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
these works that not possible
on the contrary
other
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that taken
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
action against these occupations if can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
it. I will look at both sides of the argument, and give my opinion.

On the one hand, in present time, plethora of NGO, and volunteers are working for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
mankind task that
is become
further
harmful on animals
as well
as trees. For exam, “
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Pratham
”
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organisation
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
for expand understanding of nation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
communities do not grasp about territory, and
continually
deliver the loss to the domain.
Furthermore
, these committees are
also
organized various types of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
a hunting of animal
on the contrary
this is not possible in light of the fact that most of the folks are non- vegetarian.
As a result
, they can't
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
their eating.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
vegetarian foods are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for their health.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand, abode safety works are doing by the country's authority. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
,
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thess
all activities can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
.
For instance
, the union should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
that if any damage will
be done
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
be decided
punishment or financial find against them.
Moreover
, the state should spread awareness about the surrounding, and wildlife. As
consequently
, the society will
be taken
care of plant and forest life, and
also
planting trees around them.

To sum up, without nature family cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
on the earth, and unavailability of creature the community cannot growth in life.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
do not understand of volunteers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, and they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
increased day by day against creatures.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measurements against these crowds if can be possible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stop
it. I believe that nature is additional vital for human
hence
environment and animal safety is a society's responsibility.
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IELTS essay Environment safety is not possible but some think that taken some measure it can be stopped it. Discuss the both view and give you opinion.

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