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Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from the internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that school should no longer be necessary because children can obtain all the information that they need form the internet. They can learn and be educated at home. v. 5
In the history of mankind there have been many records of violence and conflicts in the form of wars. Some people think that if a society were governed by female leaders, it would be more peaceful. However, if we look into the past history we can get numerous examples when there have been wars and conflicts even during the rule of women rulers. So, I disagree with the statement. If we had female only rulers, we probably wouldn’t be alive today. Sure most wars were caused by men, but that is only because more than 90% of rulers were men. Female rulers have also caused wars and their fraction is a lot higher than male rulers. For example, during the Tang Dynasty, the first female ruler of China, Wu Zetian who was well-known for her tyranny and cruelty, launched a series of wars to expand the territory of the empire. This didn’t happen only in China. It was Queen Victoria who invaded India, China and many other countries in close succession. Even our late Prime Minister, Indira Gandhi, led India in a war against neighbouring Pakistan which resulted in the creation of Bangladesh, formerly East Pakistan. It is understandable if you say that generally, women are more affectionate, thoughtful and gentle as compared with men. They are also less ambitious and aggressive. However, politics is decided by the interest. If you are the leader of a society, you surely have the required leadership qualities regardless of the gender. Apparently, leaders, male or female, will have to make a decision according to special interest. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, a society will not necessarily become more peaceful merely because it is governed by a female leader because, essentially, there is no difference between female and male leaders when it comes to politics.
In the history of mankind there have been
many
records of violence and conflicts in

the form of
wars
.
Some
people
think
that if a society
were governed
by female

leaders, it would be more peaceful.
However
, if we look into the past history we can

get
numerous examples when there have been
wars
and conflicts even during the

rule
of women
rulers
.
So
, I disagree with the statement.

If we had
female
only
rulers
, we
probably
wouldn’t be alive
today
. Sure most wars

were caused
by
men
,
but
that is
only
because
more than 90% of
rulers
were
men
.

Female
rulers
have
also
caused
wars
and their fraction is a lot higher than male

rulers.
For example
, during the Tang Dynasty, the
first
female
ruler
of China, Wu

Zetian
who was well-known for her tyranny and cruelty, launched a series of
wars
to

expand the territory of the empire. This didn’t happen
only
in China. It was Queen

Victoria who invaded India, China and
many
other countries in close succession.

Even our late Prime Minister, Indira Gandhi, led India in a
war
against
neighbouring


Pakistan which resulted in the creation of Bangladesh,
formerly
East Pakistan.

It is understandable if you say that
generally
, women are more affectionate,

thoughtful and gentle as compared with
men
. They are
also
less ambitious and

aggressive.
However
, politics
is decided
by the interest. If you are the
leader
of a

society, you
surely
have the required leadership qualities regardless of the gender.

Apparently
,
leaders
, male or
female
, will
have to
make
a decision according to

special interest.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, a society will not
necessarily
become

more peaceful
merely
because
it
is governed
by a
female
leader
because
,
essentially
,

there is no difference between
female
and male
leaders
when it
comes
to politics.
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IELTS essay Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from the internet and be educated at home.

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