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Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to recruit younger people instead of the elderly. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to recruit younger people instead of the elderly. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Employers in many industries today are discouraged from recruiting employees according to their ages. However, I believe that age should be taken into consideration when employing potential employees as the elderly appear to be a better fit for a company for the reasons that will be discussed in the following paragraphs. There are several advantages of providing old workers with responsible jobs, such as managing important projects or leading the team. First off, they are mostly experienced ones who often deserve respect to follow in their footsteps. Because of their job and life experience, managing the team cannot be difficult for them at all, since they know the way of communicating with their coworkers and how to share ideas and knowledge without offending them. It is also generally believed that the team of younger workers led by seniors seem to gain more pragmatic and hands-on experience. On top of that, older workers are more likely to show up for work on time and this may encourage the team to keep punctual and responsible, which are among the most important work ethics that can increase job productivity. As regards other more important qualities, older people in the workplace appear to show more signs of loyalty and are less likely to switch their job as younger colleagues do frequently. As a result of such frequent turnovers, for example, companies can spend extra money on recruiting new employees, as they have to pay for adverts or headhunters to find suitable ones for their company. Besides, older people are less likely to take days off, especially sick leave. Studies have also shown that young workers have often called in sick as compared to senior coworkers. Therefore, younger counterparts can be less flexible and punctual at the workplace that make the elderly remain at the forefront of competition among the job applicants of all ages most of the time. In conclusion, recruiting younger people in place of senior ones may not be a wise option for companies or industries at all times. Logically, older workers are far more superior than the young in terms of their experience, wisdom and loyalty to the company they have been working for.
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argue that it is not wise for an industry to recruit
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younger
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people
instead
of the elderly.

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agree
or disagree?

Employers in
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many
industries
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today
are discouraged
from recruiting employees according to their ages.
However
, I believe that age should
be taken
into consideration when employing potential employees as the elderly appear to be a better fit for a
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company
for the reasons that will
be discussed
in the following paragraphs.

There are several advantages of providing
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old
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workers
with responsible
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jobs
, such as managing
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important
projects or leading the
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team
.
First
off, they are
mostly
experienced
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ones
who
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often
deserve respect to follow in their footsteps.
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of their
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job
and life experience, managing the
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team
cannot be difficult for them at all, since they know the way of communicating with their coworkers and how to share
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ideas
and knowledge without offending them. It is
also
generally
believed that the
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team
of
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younger
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workers
led by seniors seem to gain more pragmatic and hands-on experience.
On top of that
,
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older
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workers
are more likely to
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show
up for work on time and this may encourage the
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team
to
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keep
punctual and responsible, which are among the most
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important
work ethics that can increase
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job
productivity.

As regards other more
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important
qualities,
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older
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people
in the workplace appear to
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show
more signs of loyalty and are less likely to switch their
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job
as
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younger
colleagues do
frequently
.
As a result
of such frequent turnovers,
for example
,
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companies
can spend extra money on recruiting new employees, as they
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have to
pay for adverts or headhunters to find suitable
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ones
for their
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company
.
Besides
,
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older
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people
are less likely to take days off,
especially
sick
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leave
. Studies have
also
shown that young
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workers
have
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often
called in sick as compared to senior coworkers.
Therefore
,
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younger
counterparts can be less flexible and punctual at the workplace that
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make
the elderly remain at the forefront of competition among the
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job
applicants of all ages most of the time.

In conclusion
, recruiting
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younger
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people
in place of senior
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ones
may not be a wise option for
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companies
or industries at all times.
Logically
,
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older
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workers
are far
The adjective 'more' is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: "superior to".
more superior than
the young in terms of their experience, wisdom and loyalty to the
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company
they have been working for.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to recruit younger people instead of the elderly.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
390 words
6.5
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