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Some people argue that if children behave badly, their parents should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behaveiour of their children. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people argue that if children behave badly, their parents should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behaveiour of their children. BMPym
Some people think that, if children do misbehave, then it is compulsory to take care by their parents and also give punishment, due to their bad behaviour. Personally say that, I am agree as much as disagree with this statement. Firstly, children are playing in their world, there are nothing good or bad for them. But it is their parent’s authority to teach them what is good or bad and how behave with everyone. For intense, if any child is throwing thing anywhere and fight with other children, then it is their parent’s duty to prevent him/his and explain about bad manners and how to behave with other children’s. It is helps them to be socialize and in group work. Secondly, parents should give knowledge about social skills and good behaviour. But they don’t give punishment them every time whenever they behave badly. Because of punishment, some children have wrongly affected and they hate their parents. Also, they do more bad activities. Here I Would share story about one boy “KARTIK”. In his childhood, whenever he makes mistakes, his dad punished his very badly. As a result, he is always being very frustrated and fight with his classmate’s colleagues. Whenever children behave badly, their patents must take action against them but don’t give them major punishment for every misbehave.
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, due to their
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behaviour
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as much as disagree with this statement.

Firstly
,
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children
are playing in their world, there are nothing
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good
or
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bad
for them.
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it is their
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parent’s
authority to teach them what is
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good
or
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bad
and how
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behave
with everyone. For intense, if any child is throwing thing anywhere and fight with other
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children
, then it is their
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parent’s
duty to
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prevent
him/his and
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explain
about
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bad
manners and how to
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behave
with other
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children’s
. It is
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helps
them to be
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socialize
and in group work.

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,
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parents
should
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give
knowledge about social
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skills
and
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good
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behaviour
.
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they don’t
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give
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punishment
them every time whenever they
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behave
badly
.
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punishment
,
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some
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children
have
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affected and
they hate their
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parents
.
Also
, they do more
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bad
activities. Here I Would share story about one boy “
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KARTIK
”. In his childhood, whenever he
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makes
mistakes, his dad punished his
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very
badly
.
As a result
, he is always being
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very
frustrated and fight with his classmate’s colleagues.

Whenever
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children
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behave
badly
, their patents
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must
take action against them
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but
don’t
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give
them major
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punishment
for every misbehave.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that if children behave badly, their parents should accept responsibility and also be punished for the behaveiour of their children.

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