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Some people argue that holding sporting events is beneficial to countries' development. However, other people hold the opposite opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people claim that development will not happen through events such as sporting events, while others, including me, believe that an international event can be a trigger for the thriving of the tourism industry, which plays an important role in development. Recently, hosting international sports competitions has become more of political competition to demonstrate the countries' power, and governments seem to conceal their intentions behind the term development. Since various factors contributing to the growth of countries, we can hardly state that it will occur through holding matches. It sounds, in fact, more complicated than they assert sporting events assist in advancement trend. If a country wants to host the World Cup, as an example, it must have pitches, stadiums, and even hotels with exacting standards, so they attempt to reach them as soon as possible. Indeed, the foremost matter is to meet acceptable standards without considering the concept of development and if it is said that it is just a shadow of it, it might not be wrong. Therefore, community leaders seemingly do it all not for the sake of progress but for the sake of receiving a host to boast of their ability. At first glance, the connection between carrying out World Championships and development is unclear, but if we look deeply, its hidden angles will be revealed. It provides a great opportunity for the host country to introduce its tourist attractions to those who come to watch a game to strengthen the tourism industry, whose vital role in the cultural and economic development of a country is not covert to anyone. Not only will a significant number of jobs be created, but an unsuitable part of the culture will also be promoted. Additionally, a huge amount of money is brought by sports enthusiasts via organizing a world-class tournament. They need accommodation, food, and transportation, and due to higher demand, the price of renting a room or booking a hotel room increases dramatically. As a result, holding these events indirectly and directly affect different parts of the development. In conclusion, staging sports events is an effective way to help boost a country's culture and economic growth while some have a negative attitude towards it.
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people
claim that
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development
will not happen through
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events
such as sporting
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events
, while others, including me, believe that an international
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event
can be a trigger for the thriving of the tourism industry, which plays an
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important
role in development.

Recently, hosting international sports competitions has become more of political competition to demonstrate the countries' power, and
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governments
seem to conceal their intentions behind the term
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development
. Since various factors contributing to the growth of
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countries
, we can hardly state that it will occur through holding matches. It sounds, in fact, more complicated than they assert sporting
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events
assist in advancement trend. If a
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country
wants to host the World Cup, as an example, it
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must
have pitches, stadiums, and even hotels with exacting standards,
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so
they attempt to reach them as
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soon
as possible.
Indeed
, the foremost matter is to
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meet
acceptable standards without considering the concept of
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development
and if it
is said
that it is
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just
a shadow of it, it might not be
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wrong
.
Therefore
, community leaders
seemingly
do it all not for the sake of progress
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but
for the sake of receiving a host to boast of their ability.

At
first
glance, the
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connection between
carrying out World Championships and
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development
is unclear,
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but
if we look
deeply
, its hidden angles will
be revealed
. It provides a great opportunity for the host
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country
to introduce its tourist attractions to those who
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come
to
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watch
a game to strengthen the tourism industry, whose vital role in the cultural and economic
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development
of a
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country
is not covert to anyone. Not
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only
will a significant number of jobs
be created
,
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but
an unsuitable part of the culture will
also
be promoted
.
Additionally
, a huge amount of money
is brought
by sports enthusiasts via organizing a world-
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class
tournament. They need accommodation, food, and transportation, and due to higher demand, the price of renting a room or booking a hotel room increases
dramatically
.
As a result
, holding these
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events
indirectly
and
directly
affect
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different
parts of the development.

In conclusion
, staging sports
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events
is an effective way to
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help
boost a country's culture and economic growth while
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some
have a
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negative
attitude towards it.
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IELTS essay Some people argue that holding sporting events is beneficial to countries' development. However, other people hold the opposite opinion.

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