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Some people argue that current Social media like T. V news, newspaper and radio provide wrong information. Some people say that the current social media are misleading the people and create problems within the society. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people argue that current Social media like T. V news, newspaper and radio provide wrong information. Some people say that the current social media are misleading the people and create problems within the society. v. 2
As the world is expose to several problems, modern media like T. V news, radio and newspaper are expecting to make a contribution for a better society. However, this is not the case in our today media press. Profit making media organizations are only concerned about money rather than people interests. In addition, the press has been presenting news in ways to control audience thoughts. Therefore, I agree that media has played a vital role in misleading the people. The problem with profit media is that they show people what they want to see rather than discussing social and community problems, in order to make money. People this days want some spice in the news they read or watch irrespectively of the fact that the news is highlighting the proper fact or not. For instance, the T. V media would choose to spend its entire air time to show the weeding of celebrities instead of presenting problems that the general public is facing. No doubt the people want some entertainment through the media press, but the balance has to be maintained between entertainment and news. Another problem is that the media press has become so strong that it has the power to control how people think. Most of the general public relates itself to opinion presented in the T. V. anchors or newspaper writer. Not only does it mislead them. It also limits their skills to think and analyze. The news captivate people in such a way that it almost becomes impossible to form an individual unbiased opinion about an incident. It is time that the media realize that there are thing more important than money and control, rather than being selfish, greedy and power hunger, they should be true representation of the people’s voice and opinion.
As the world is expose to several
problems
, modern
media
like T. V
news
, radio and newspaper are expecting to
make
a contribution for a better society.
However
, this is not the case in our
today
media
press
. Profit making
media
organizations are
only
concerned about money
rather
than
people
interests
.
In addition
, the
press
has been presenting
news
in ways to control audience thoughts.
Therefore
, I
agree
that
media
has played a vital role in misleading the
people
.

The
problem
with profit
media
is that they
show
people
what they want to
see
rather
than discussing social and community
problems
, in order to
make
money.
People
this days
want
some
spice in the
news
they read or
watch
irrespectively
of the fact that the
news
is highlighting the proper fact or not.
For instance
, the T. V
media
would choose to spend its entire air time to
show
the weeding of celebrities
instead
of presenting
problems
that the
general public
is facing. No doubt the
people
want
some
entertainment through the
media
press
,
but
the balance
has to
be maintained
between entertainment and news.

Another
problem
is that the
media
press
has become
so
strong that it has the power to control how
people
think
. Most of the
general public
relates itself to opinion presented in the T. V. anchors or newspaper writer. Not
only
does it mislead them. It
also
limits their
skills
to
think
and analyze. The
news
captivate
people
in such a way that it almost becomes impossible to form an individual unbiased opinion about an incident.

It is time that the
media
realize that there are
thing
more
important
than money and control,
rather
than being selfish, greedy and power hunger, they should be true representation of the
people’s
voice and opinion.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people argue that current Social media like T. V news, newspaper and radio provide wrong information. Some people say that the current social media are misleading the people and create problems within the society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
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