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Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns

Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns 3abDn
Topic of the essay refers to the urbanizataion, as the population of cities is incereasing at an alarming rate. It is also true that young blood is leaving the rural areas to find better earning opportunities and to enjoy advance lifestyle in cities. Many reasons are working behind this phenomenon. This essay briefly discuss those reasons. Overall, the facilities available in countryside areas are less as compared to towns. New generation with higher education want to work and live in a competible environment. Hence, they preferred to leave their homes for better future. Moreover, due to lack of job opportunities in villages and limited access to basic facilities (medical, education, technology) encourage the people for migration to cities. In towns, young people can find jobs or other earning sources to meet their basic needs. consequently, investors also target the developed ares for their investment or to setup a new industry, which brings new opportunities for unemployeed peoples. therefore, adolescent people leave their homes and families behind to work in indurtries. However, urbanization is a big problem for governments because of disproporationate population between rural areas and cities. Numerous issues are aries due to this massive migration. for instance, long trafic james, unsafe residential areas, crimes and others. meanwhile in villages families are facing different problems of surviving as well as social and ethical issues take place in the absence of household head. Another issue is hat older people are unwilling to migrate with their ofsprings because they have strong affaction with their places. which cause discomfort and sometimes quarel among family members. while considering all the above discussed issues, i strongly recommend that governments should take necessary actions to over come this problem. for example, oepning of factories in less developed areas, better infrastructure, access to basic needs of life can refrain the young people t migrate. In nutshell, young people are leaving their homes and families for good earning opportunities and to secure the future of their children. if all of the basic needs are available in the villages they will prefer to stay in their home areas with their families.
Topic of the essay refers to the
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urbanizataion
, as the population of
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cities
is
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incereasing
at an alarming rate. It is
also
true that
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young
blood is leaving the rural
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areas
to find better earning
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opportunities
and to enjoy advance lifestyle in
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cities
.
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Many
reasons are working behind this phenomenon. This essay
briefly
discuss those reasons.

Overall
, the facilities available in countryside
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areas
are less
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as
compared to towns. New generation with higher education want to work and
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live
in a
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competible
environment.
Hence
, they preferred to
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leave
their
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homes
for better future.

Moreover
, due to lack of job
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opportunities
in villages and limited access to
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basic
facilities (medical, education, technology) encourage the
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people
for migration to
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cities
. In towns,
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young
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people
can find jobs or other earning sources to
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meet
their
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basic
needs.
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consequently
, investors
also
target the developed ares for their investment or
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to setup
a new industry, which brings new
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opportunities
for
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unemployeed
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peoples
.
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therefore
, adolescent
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people
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leave
their
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homes
and
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families
behind to work in
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indurtries
.

However
, urbanization is a
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big
problem for
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governments
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because
of
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disproporationate
population between rural
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areas
and
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cities
. Numerous
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issues
are
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aries
due to this massive migration.
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for
instance, long
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trafic
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james
, unsafe residential
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areas
, crimes
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and others
.
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meanwhile
in villages
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families
are facing
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different
problems of surviving
as well
as social and ethical
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issues
take place in the absence of household head. Another
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issue
is hat older
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people
are unwilling to migrate with their
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ofsprings
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because
they have strong
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affaction
with their places.
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which
cause discomfort and
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sometimes
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quarel
among
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family
members.

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while
considering all the above discussed
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issues
,
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i
strongly
recommend that
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governments
should take necessary actions to over
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come
this problem.
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for
example,
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oepning
of factories in less developed
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areas
, better infrastructure, access to
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basic
needs of life can refrain the
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young
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people
t migrate.

In nutshell,
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young
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people
are leaving their
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homes
and
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families
for
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good
earning
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opportunities
and to secure the future of their children.
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if
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all of the
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basic
needs are available in the villages they will prefer to stay in their home
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areas
with their
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families
.
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IELTS essay Some People Are Leaving The Countryside To Live In Cities And Towns

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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