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Some people are born to be the leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people are born to be the leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. v. 2
Some people argue that people are born to be leaders and others say that leadership can be learned. I strongly believe it is an assumption that leaders are born. Leadership qualities can be learned not as a process-oriented way but as an inspirational thought. The people who lead a group, company, or nation inherits the administrative qualities from the childhood. It can be observed that the child starts communicating with the children around. For example, In schools, a leader grabs the opportunity to monitor the class. They provide a helping attitude toward society. They even start analysing the issues and try to get the solutions for a good cause. In India, we have many national leaders born creations like Mahatma Gandhi. Hence, people assume leaders are born and do not know the facts they have faced many failures. On the other hand, leadership qualities can be learned only by the dedication, hard work, commitment, motivating groups with positive attitudes, confidence. One should possess determination, experience, intelligence, and practice skills to overcome the right challenges. For example, a person inspired by a political leader tries to lead the neighbourhood issues to the government and would be helpful to bring reforms in the nation. I have experience related to leadership. My fore grandfather was a freedom fighter and I am the follower and not born as a leader. Finally, I strongly conclude that people are not born leaders and are made with the situations around with a never give up attitude.
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argue that
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are born
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leaders
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and others
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leadership
can
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. I
strongly
believe it is an assumption that
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leaders
are born
.
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qualities can
be learned
not as a process-oriented way
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but
as an inspirational
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thought
.

The
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people
who lead a group,
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company
, or nation inherits the administrative qualities from the childhood. It can
be observed
that the child
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starts
communicating with the children around.
For example
, In schools, a
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leader
grabs the opportunity to monitor the
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class
. They provide a helping attitude toward society. They even
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start
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analysing
the issues and try to
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get
the solutions for a
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good
cause. In India, we have
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many
national
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leaders
born creations like Mahatma Gandhi.
Hence
,
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people
assume
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leaders
are born
and do not know the facts they have faced
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many
failures.

On the other hand
,
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leadership
qualities can
be learned
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only
by the dedication,
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hard
work, commitment, motivating groups with
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positive
attitudes, confidence. One should possess determination, experience, intelligence, and practice
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skills
to overcome the right challenges.
For example
, a person inspired by a political
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leader
tries to lead the
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neighbourhood
issues to the
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government
and would be helpful to bring reforms in the nation. I have experience related to
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leadership
. My fore grandfather was a freedom
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fighter and
I am the follower and not born as a leader.

Finally
, I
strongly
conclude that
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people
are not born
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leaders
and
are made
with the situations around with a never give up attitude.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people are born to be the leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
249 words
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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