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People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v.1

People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1
Everyone agrees that modern life gets more stressful day by day, making us vulnerable to lots of pressure. This essay will discuss the causes as well as a possible ways to tackle the problem. Undoubtedly, following the development of nations, today’s world is becoming more competitive day by day in terms of career for adults and study for youngsters. To cope up with this competitive world, people have to keep pace with it, challenging numerous issues like expectation of employers to do more work or work overtime most of the working days without being extra paid. Students are also becoming more stressful as they are sent by their parents to attend extra tuition classes so that there are improvements in their academic performance. Moreover, society willingly places themselves under these unfavourable conditions trying to achieve more and more. Apparently, this endless race to “stay up to date” has made the life of every individual a highly stressful one. Besides that, density and traffic have also contributed to the problem as well. In order to work on high-paying jobs, people are forced to commute to work at the earliest time of the day and come home late at night to avoid traffic. As a consequence, many of these people are exhausted, frustrated and burn out with their daily lives having no time for their families and themselves. In my opinion, the only way to beat the stress is to look for meaning in life. Instead of rushing after material gains, we should look inward and count with our nature. Setting priorities is equally important. We should ask ourselves what we want to achieve in our life. For example, finding a more comfortable job that closer to home, which might regain more time for family, though it can be less paying, could be the awesome decision in terms of wellbeing. This approach actually makes our lives a lot less stressful.
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that modern
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life
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gets
more
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stressful
day by day, making us vulnerable to lots of pressure. This essay will discuss the causes
as well
as a possible
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ways
to tackle the problem.

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, following the development of nations,
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today
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people
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have to
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keep
pace with it, challenging numerous issues like expectation of employers to do more
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work
or
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work
overtime most of the working days without being extra paid. Students are
also
becoming more
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stressful
as they are
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sent
by their parents to attend extra tuition classes
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so
that there are improvements in their academic performance.
Moreover
, society
willingly
places themselves under these
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unfavourable
conditions trying to achieve more and more.
Apparently
, this endless race to “stay up to date” has made the
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life
of every individual a
highly
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stressful
one.

Besides
that, density and traffic have
also
contributed to the problem
as well
. In order to
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work
on high-paying jobs,
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people
are forced
to commute to
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work
at the earliest time of the day and
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come
home late at night to avoid traffic. As a consequence,
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many
of these
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people
are exhausted
, frustrated and burn out with their daily
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lives
having no time for their families and themselves.

In my opinion, the
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only
way to beat the
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stress
is to look for meaning in
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life
.
Instead
of rushing after material gains, we should look inward and count with our nature. Setting priorities is
equally
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important
. We should ask ourselves what we want to achieve in our
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life
.
For example
, finding a more comfortable job that closer to home, which might regain more time for family, though it can be less paying, could be the awesome decision in terms of
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wellbeing
. This approach actually
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makes
our
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lives
a lot less
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stressful
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay People’s lives are becoming increasing stressful nowadays and there are many reasons behind this. Many people relate this to the technological advancement while others say that high living costs and competitions are the main reasons for this stressful life we have. In your opinion what are the reasons behind this? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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