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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with what are the advantages and dis advantages for the children having large number of toys

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with what are the advantages and dis advantages for the children having large number of toys YMX5
When parents are purchase toys so children's are used to play. since child hood children's love playing. in mordern days yet technology development veraity of playing things are manufactured though children's used to play toys Firstly the advantages of playing in child hood children's become happy although they were entertain. but parents are to very egregious Secondly the disadvantages of playing toys children might be preverticated and so on. though children's might not mingle with parents.
When parents are
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used
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the advantages of
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become happy although they were
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parents are to
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the disadvantages of
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toys children might be
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IELTS essay Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with what are the advantages and dis advantages for the children having large number of toys

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
76 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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