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Some parents believe that reading entertainment books is waste of time. In their opinion, children should read only serious, educational books. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience. v.2

Some parents believe that reading entertainment books is waste of time. In their opinion, children should read only serious, educational books. Give reason for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2
Education is a powerful weapon which we can use to run this world on a progressive track. Similarly, an individual can acquire education from distinct ways such as by reading books, newspaper and much more. One of the most controversial issue today leads to that, children should not be allowed to read entertainment books; according to some parents. I completely agree with the given topic, and give reasons for my answer through some assertions and examples in the further piece of essay. The first step to understand that, why parents think that reading entertainment books is waste of time? The first prominent reason is, some parents believe that if children will read those books than there will be huge impact on there academic studies. They say that, children can get distracted from there studies and they will gain fewer marks in academics result. However, children love to read stuff which is either any action or drama story in the books, they get fascinated towards them and start behaving similar. Hence, that is why some parents feel that, concentration of children can be vanished from serious studies which is highly beneficial for them to adapt. The second foremost reason is, nowadays, if parents allow their child to read such books then they get addicted towards them. Children find these books interesting and when parents ask them to leave than they get aggressive which makes parents think to not let them read those books again. Likewise, no parent want their child to be stubborn, but when children get attracted to such stuff once it is hard to make them understand that this is not beneficial. A good illustration is, it is recently shown in schools survey that 70% of children are getting low marks and becoming aggressive by watching such cartoons and by reading stuff full of actions and drama. All in all, As we all know that children are Innocent and adapt new things rapidly. So, it is duty of parents to take care of their children that they are acquiring appropriate knowledge which can be helpful for them in the future.
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to run this world on a progressive
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.
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, newspaper and much more. One of the most controversial issue
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leads to that,
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children
should not be
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allowed
to
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read
entertainment
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books
; according to
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some
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parents
. I completely
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agree
with the
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topic, and give reasons for my answer through
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some
assertions and examples in the
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piece of essay.

The
first
step to understand that, why
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parents
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think
that reading entertainment
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books
is waste of time? The
first
prominent reason is,
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some
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parents
believe that if
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will
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those
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than there will be huge impact on
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academic studies. They say that,
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children
can
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distracted from there
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studies and
they will gain fewer marks in academics result.
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,
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children
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to
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read
stuff which is either any action or drama story in the
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books
, they
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fascinated towards them and
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behaving similar.
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why
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some
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parents
feel that, concentration of
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children
can
be vanished
from serious studies which is
highly
beneficial for them to adapt.

The second foremost reason is, nowadays, if
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parents
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their child to
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read
such
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books
then they
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addicted towards them.
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find these
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interesting and when
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ask them to
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than they
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aggressive which
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them
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again.
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want their child to be stubborn,
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when
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children
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attracted to such stuff once it is
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hard
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them understand that this is not beneficial. A
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illustration is, it is recently shown in schools survey that 70% of
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children
are getting low marks and becoming aggressive by watching such cartoons and by reading stuff full of actions and drama.

All in all, As we all know that
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children
are Innocent and adapt new things
rapidly
.
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So
, it is duty of
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parents
to take care of their
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children
that they are acquiring appropriate knowledge which can be helpful for them in the future.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some parents believe that reading entertainment books is waste of time. In their opinion, children should read only serious, educational books. Give reason for your answer and include relevant examples from your own experience. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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