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Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. What is your opinion? v.1

Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. What is your opinion? v. 1
In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue that children ought to read only books with educational importance and reading books for relaxation is a waste of time. A lion's share of the society favours it, however the rest goes adverse it. In my opinion, children should not be restricted to read only certain genre of books because both the pastime and educational books serve the purpose of imparting positive skills in children. I see eye to eye, with the central idea for various reasons. First and foremost, Some parents think that children should be motivated to read only educational books and not comics and fiction which are not worth their age. They think so because educational books impart knowledge and information that help children with their studies and future progress. For example, these books provide relevant and real information about incidents happening across the globe which eventually enables children to explore the world through books. Furthermore, I admit that the role of educational books on children’s intellectual growth is crucial and hence, undeniable. On the loggerhead, some critics go against the above discussed assertions. I do not believe that reading short stories, novels or fiction for fun is a waste of time. The stories and the incidents narrated in these books conspicuously improve children’s creativity and imagination. For instance, by reading Spiderman and Superman comics juveniles knows how they help weak people. Moreover, serious facts and events in academic texts can make reading a boring activity for them while entertainment books, kindle their interest, boost their reading skills and thus, transform them into voracious readers in future. Unlike academic texts, which contain a plethora of technical terms and usages, the simple language in story books enables children to grasp the ideas easily. In conclusion, educational books are useful for developing children’s intelligence and study skills, whereas entertainment books help in their overall development. Therefore, I think that reading pastime books should not be considered as a waste of time; rather, they should be given the same importance as other books.
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for relaxation is a waste of time. A lion's share of the society
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certain genre of
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because
both the pastime and
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educational
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books
serve the purpose of imparting
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positive
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skills
in children.

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for various reasons.
First
and foremost,
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parents
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that
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children
should
be motivated
to read
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educational
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and not comics and fiction which are not worth their age. They
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think
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educational
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impart knowledge and information that
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help
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children
with their studies and future progress.
For example
, these
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books
provide relevant and real information about incidents happening across the globe which
eventually
enables
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children
to explore the world through
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books
.
Furthermore
, I admit that the role of
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educational
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books
on
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children’s
intellectual growth is crucial and
hence
, undeniable.

On the loggerhead,
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some
critics go against the above discussed assertions. I do not believe that
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reading
short stories, novels or fiction for fun is a waste of time. The stories and the incidents narrated in these
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books
conspicuously
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improve
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children’s
creativity and imagination.
For instance
, by
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reading
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Spiderman
and Superman comics juveniles knows how they
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help
weak
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people
.
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, serious facts and
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events
in academic texts can
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a boring activity for them while entertainment
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books
, kindle their interest, boost their
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reading
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skills
and
thus
, transform them into voracious readers
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in future
. Unlike academic texts, which contain a plethora of technical terms and usages, the simple language in story
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enables
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children
to grasp the
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ideas
easily
.

In conclusion
,
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educational
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are useful for developing
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children’s
intelligence and study
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skills
, whereas entertainment
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books
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help
in their
overall
development.
Therefore
, I
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think
that
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reading
pastime
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books
should not
be considered
as a waste of time;
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, they should be
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given
the same importance as other
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.
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IELTS essay Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of children’s time. They think that their children should read only serious educational books. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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