Many parents today are concerned with the trend that more and more violent materials are being used in teenager’s recreation. I think such trend may depress our children and may ruin their life, while there are still some actions can be taken by parents and government to solve them.
Firstly, students with higher exposure to violence tend to suffer more from the depression. Students at a young age may still find hard to witness the violence since they may cause children paranoid and anxious; eventually they become an introvert and suffer the mental pain on their own. Secondly, such trend may increase crime rates among the youth. Students at a young age may easily incited by the violent images and may mocking the actors and committing crimes like drug dealing, kidnapping, and assault in their future.
However, there are still some solutions to this and one of them is asking parents to spend more time with their children. By doing so, parents can find their children’s issue earlier and take them to receive professional treatments from doctors so that children are more likely and faster to recover from depression. The other method is to strengthen regulations on all types of entertainments by government, which means a more specific grading of movies or games should be implemented. Such solution may lower the exposure to teenagers as every movie from now on will be graded as whether or not suitable for children under 19 and movie theatres will be financially penalized for showing a movie which is not supposed shown to teenagers.
In conclusion, violent materials may make children today more aggressive and may potentially destroy their life, but parents and the government still can prevent this from happening.
Many
parents
today
are concerned
with the trend that more and more violent materials are being
used
in
teenager
’s recreation. I
think
such trend may depress our
children
and may ruin their life, while there are
still
some
actions can
be taken
by
parents
and
government
to solve them.
Firstly
, students with higher exposure to violence tend to suffer more from the depression. Students at a young age may
still
find
hard
to witness the violence since they may cause
children
paranoid and anxious;
eventually
they become an introvert and suffer the mental pain on their
own
.
Secondly
, such trend may increase crime rates among the youth. Students at a young age may
easily
incited
by the violent images and may mocking the actors and committing crimes like drug dealing, kidnapping, and assault in their future.
However
, there are
still
some
solutions to this and one of them is asking
parents
to spend more time with their
children
. By doing
so
,
parents
can find their
children’s
issue earlier and take them to receive professional treatments from doctors
so
that
children
are more likely and faster to recover from depression. The other method is to strengthen regulations on all types of entertainments by
government
, which means a more specific grading of
movies
or games should
be implemented
. Such solution may lower the exposure to
teenagers
as every
movie
from
now
on will
be graded
as
whether or not
suitable for
children
under 19 and
movie
theatres
will be
financially
penalized for showing a
movie
which is not supposed shown to
teenagers
.
In conclusion
, violent materials may
make
children
today
more aggressive and may
potentially
destroy
their life,
but
parents
and the
government
still
can
prevent
this from happening.
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