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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? A9Ke
Museums and art galleries are no doubt a huge part of a city’s heritage and have vast educational values to them. Visitors are charged with entry fees in certain art galleries and museums while some have free entries for their guest. This essay discusses the benefits of charging admission fees along with the drawbacks of it. The primary advantage of billing visitors is the additional revenue reaped by these places. For instance, this earning can be used for the purpose of renovation as well as the maintenance of the paintings and artefacts. Along with this the management is able to secure the galleries from theft by installing high tech security devices. Furthermore, the surplus dividend can be donated to the immediate family of the artists or perhaps is given to the founders of such places. On the contrary, there are shortcomings to the charging visitation fees as well. Museums and art galleries were established for educating people about a plethora of talented artists of the past. Several education institutions arrange their field visits to such places, billing admission fees may deter them as their expense will rise enormously. Additionally, several researchers and arts students are required to tour these places regularly for their research and charging them for every visit might constitute an additional cost in their research study. To conclude, with the aforementioned points, I believe that art galleries and museums can avoid charging their guest as these places were founded for educational purposes and enlightening the public about the cultural heritage of that particular city.
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are no doubt a huge part of a city’s heritage and have vast educational values to them. Visitors
are charged
with entry
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fees
in certain
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art
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galleries
and
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museums
while
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some
have free entries for their guest. This essay discusses the benefits of
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charging
admission
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fees
along with the drawbacks of it.

The primary advantage of billing visitors is the additional revenue reaped by these
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places
.
For instance
, this earning can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for the purpose of renovation
as well
as the maintenance of the paintings and
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artefacts
. Along with this the management is able to secure the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
galleries
from theft by installing high tech security devices.
Furthermore
, the surplus dividend can
be donated
to the immediate family of the artists or perhaps is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to the founders of such places.

On the contrary
, there are shortcomings to the
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charging
visitation
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fees
as well
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Museums
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
galleries
were established
for educating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
about a plethora of talented artists of the past. Several education institutions arrange their field visits to such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
, billing admission
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
may deter them as their expense will rise
enormously
.
Additionally
, several researchers and
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arts
students
are required
to tour these
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places
regularly
for their research and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charging
them for every visit might constitute an additional cost in their research study.

To conclude
, with the aforementioned points, I believe that
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art
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galleries
and
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museums
can avoid
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charging
their guest as these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
were founded
for educational purposes and enlightening the public about the cultural heritage of that particular city.

IELTS essay Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
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