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Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns?

Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns? Djgp
Living in the Megacity has become a concerning issue all over the world, especially in this contemporary era. Today's people are facing more problem in the urban areas in their daily life there are author of reasons behind this notion, I disagree with this point of view it will be clear in subsequent paragraphs. To embark with, their multifarious factors which leads the problems for the people who are living in the city side. one of the most contingent reason is the traffic concern. which has increased manifolds. To be more precise, due to over use of private vehicle, it leads the problem of pollution such as air, noise and wateras well. in this way people cannot live in the city for a long time. For example, gasoline burning engines are the main cost this is because, it emits harmful gases resulting in global warming that facts on people health. Another cose is a high rate of crime rate. which is more common in the city side, these days crime such as drug dealing, robbery and nothing as well. However, it is not a longer solution of that government of motivate people towards villages because it can increase the problem for villagers. Meanwhile, the nation should improve the facilities in cities such as a cctv cameras every look at corner as well as improvement in the public transport that can mitigate pollution and the local citizens can reduce some of the problems by using to walk rather than drive on private vehicle for short distance it would be win and win situation for both the government and the people. At the end, recapitulating the whole discussion I would like to mention that pollution and crime are the concerning issues that people facing in the urban areas while, the government should focus on improve the opportunities in these places rather than move people towards other space or region.
Living in the
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has become a concerning issue all over the world,
especially
in this contemporary era.
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Today
's
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people
are facing more
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problem
in the urban areas in their daily life there are
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author
of reasons behind this notion, I disagree with this point of view it will be
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clear
in subsequent paragraphs.

To embark with, their multifarious factors which leads the
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problems
for the
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people
who are living in the city side.
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one
of the most contingent
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reason
is the traffic concern.
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which
has increased manifolds. To be more precise, due to over
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use
of private vehicle, it leads the
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problem
of pollution such as air, noise and
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wateras
well.
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in
this way
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people
cannot
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live
in the city for a long time.
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, gasoline burning engines are the main cost this is
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because
, it emits harmful gases resulting in global warming that facts on
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people
health. Another
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cose
is a high rate of crime rate.
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which
is more common in the city side, these
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days
crime such as drug dealing, robbery and nothing
as well
.

However
, it is not a longer solution of that
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government
of motivate
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people
towards villages
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because
it can increase the
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problem
for villagers. Meanwhile, the nation should
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improve
the facilities in
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cities
such as a
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cctv
cameras every look at corner
as well
as improvement in the public transport that can mitigate pollution and the local citizens can
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reduce
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
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problems
by using to walk
rather
than drive on private vehicle for short distance it would be
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win
and win situation for both the
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government
and the
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people
.

At the
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end
, recapitulating the whole discussion I would like to mention that pollution and crime are the concerning issues that
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people
facing in the urban areas while, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should focus on
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improve
the opportunities in these places
rather
than
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move
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people
towards other space or region.

IELTS essay Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns?

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317 words
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