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Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for yhe things they creste,while others struggle to survive.Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the contemporary society art considerably important from the ancient times. Some masterpieces which are well paid and help the creator to build their reputation whereas many others have to take pains to earn it. There is a strong argument that the authority should take some effort to gain balance of this inequitable problem. In my opinion, i totally disagree with this notion. It is undeniable that artists are more able to manage and use their time as well as possible. They can see their activity which can help them to remember the structure of their job. As a result, it can clear why artists can collect more money through their creativity than others. Moreover, artists can be more able to maximize and improve their prospects which they have. Everybody has potential which has to be maximized for being better because talent is one of the important thing in catnching success. For instance, most professional painter attend painting courses in order to get the best result of their painting and become famous painter. So, it becomes enermous evidence that artists are smart to heighten their self prospects and easy to make more money. In addition to this, earning money depend on every artists' inspiration and talent. If the government take some measures to equal earning money, competition can not ignored among professional creators. And also, if all arts is equally estamated by organisation. locality can not figure out the best art. As a result, everybody condemn government in this action and skillful artists are not appreciate by public. To conclude, some artistic people are paid quite well for their efforts, whereas the majority find it difficult to obtain work or to sell their arts. In my opinion, even though some people suffer from low income, fhe government can not take steps to make salary between artists.
In the contemporary society
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art
considerably
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important
from the ancient times.
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masterpieces which are well paid and
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help
the creator to build their reputation whereas
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many
others
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have to
take pains to earn it. There is a strong argument that the authority should take
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some
effort to gain balance of this inequitable problem. In my opinion,
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i
totally
disagree with this notion. It is undeniable that
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artists
are more able to manage and
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use
their time
as well
as possible. They can
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see
their activity which can
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help
them to remember the structure of their job.
As a result
, it can
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clear
why
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artists
can collect more
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money
through their creativity than others.
Moreover
,
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artists
can be more able to maximize and
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improve
their prospects which they have. Everybody has potential which
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has to
be maximized
for being better
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because
talent is one of the
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important
thing in
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catnching
success.
For instance
, most professional painter attend painting courses in order to
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get
the best result of their painting and become
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famous
painter.
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So
, it becomes
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enermous
evidence that
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artists
are smart to heighten their self prospects and easy to
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make
more
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money
.
In addition
to this, earning
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money
depend on every artists' inspiration and talent. If the
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government
take
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some
measures to equal earning
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money
, competition can not
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among professional creators. And
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, if all
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arts
is
equally
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estamated
by
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organisation
.
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locality
can not figure out the best
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art
.
As a result
, everybody
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condemn
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government
in this action and skillful
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artists
are not
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appreciate
by public.
To conclude
,
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some
artistic
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people
are paid
quite well for their efforts, whereas the majority find it difficult to obtain work or to sell their
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arts
. In my opinion,
even though
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people
suffer from low income,
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fhe
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government
can not take steps to
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salary between
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artists
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IELTS essay Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for yhe things they creste, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.

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  American English
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306 words
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