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Some information about myself

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Today, i want to introduce about myself. My full name is Nguyen Thi Hong, you can call me Hong. I’m 21 years old and my hometown is Nam Dinh province. I’ve been studying and working in Bac Ninh for 2 years so i still live here until now. I’m studying about acounting major and working as a receptionist in a Chinese hotel. Reading books, travelling, watching movies. . . are my hobbies, but listening to music make i like most because i feel very comfortable when i listen to my music lists. My family has 5 people: my parents, my older brother, me and my younger sister. My dad is 40 years old and he is a truck driver. My mom is younger, her age is 37 and her daily work is housework. My brother is 5 years older than me and he is now serving in my country’s military. My sister is 2 years old with a cute face and beautiful eyes. Because of Covid-19, we are not see each other often. I miss my family so much. I hope that the epidemic will pass soon so that we can be reunited with my family, have dinner together, watch funny TV shows, travel together every summer vacation. I have a great love for my family.
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want to introduce about myself. My full name is Nguyen
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Hong, you can call me Hong. I’m 21 years
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and my hometown is Nam
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province. I’ve been studying and working in
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Bac
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for 2 years
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still
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’m studying about
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major and working as a receptionist in a Chinese hotel. Reading books, travelling, watching movies.
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my hobbies,
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listening to music
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like most
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feel
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comfortable when
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listen to my music lists.

My
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family
has 5
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mom is younger, her age is 37 and her daily work is housework.
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brother is 5 years older than
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serving in my country’s military.
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sister is 2 years
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with a cute face and
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each other
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. I miss my
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family
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much. I hope that the epidemic will pass
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soon
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that we can
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, have dinner together,
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watch
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funny
TV
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, travel together every summer vacation.
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have a great
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IELTS essay Some information about myself

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
216 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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