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talk about your idea if you had a huge amount of money

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Currently, obesity is becoming an increasing issue in both developed and less developed regions of the world. Along with that, malnutrition is also a worrying problem for mothers whose young children. So, if I had a huge amount of money, I would invest it into a plan I have always cherished. That is opening a nutrition counseling center. Firstly, I'll spend half of the money to build a center which has a large space and painted calm colour. My clients will include not only the children who have trouble with weight, but also the dults who need a healthy diet to get in ideal body shape. My job sets up a diet scientifically based on each client's finances and food preference. With half of the remaining money, I will use it for marketing, pay staff salaries, a few for promotion and discounts on the opening days and other expenses incurred. I'll focus on finding clients in three ways. At first, I will invest money in advertising on Facebook. Secondly, I'll participate in child care groups, weight gain/loss groups, then I'll give them nutritional advice, thereby creating trust and promoting my center. Thirdly, I will hire some alumnus to hand out discount voucher to parents at the preschools. In addition, I will also advise my friends and relatives for free, and hope that they will introduce my center to their acquaintances. Although it seems greatly, but I hope that I will be able to make this plan becomes true by myself without other investor's money.
Currently
, obesity is becoming an increasing issue in both developed and less developed regions of the world. Along with that, malnutrition is
also
a worrying problem for mothers whose young children.
So
, if I had a huge amount of
money
, I would invest it into a plan I have always cherished.
That is
opening a nutrition counseling center.

Firstly
, I'll spend half of the
money
to build a center which has a large space and painted calm
colour
. My clients will include not
only
the children who have trouble with weight,
but
also
the
dults
who need a healthy diet to
get
in ideal body shape. My job sets up a diet
scientifically
based on each client's finances and food preference.

With half of the remaining
money
, I will
use
it for marketing, pay staff salaries, a few for promotion and discounts on the opening days and other expenses incurred. I'll focus on finding clients in three ways. At
first
, I will invest
money
in advertising on Facebook.
Secondly
, I'll participate in child care groups, weight gain/loss groups, then I'll give them nutritional advice, thereby creating trust and promoting my center.
Thirdly
, I will hire
some
alumnus to hand out discount voucher to parents at the preschools.
In addition
, I will
also
advise my friends and relatives for free, and hope that they will introduce my center to their acquaintances.

Although it seems
greatly
,
but
I hope that I will be able to
make
this plan becomes true by myself without other investor's
money
.
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IELTS essay talk about your idea if you had a huge amount of money

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  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
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