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Some individuals believe government should implement free reading rooms in every

Some individuals believe government should implement free reading rooms in every pLwr9
Some individuals believe government should implement free reading rooms in every cities. Other people think it is unwanted cost because more information can be accessed via online. My point of view is government should invest more money in online platforms than the physical libraries. However, review of both options will be discussed in the essay. Due to the rapid improvement of technology and cyber access in the world, accessing the information via online has been increased. Therefore, more advantages can be discussed than the number of disadvantages. I will explain two solid benefits in order to support my opinion of online libraries. Firstly, online information can be obtained at any given time where no time frame is restricted. And physical libraries are opened limited time period. For example, if somebody wants to refer the some details at mid night which can be taken from online where libraries are closed at that time. Secondly, unlimited books and other reading materials can be accessed and download facilities are allowed where people can save relevant information at free of charge as E- Booklets. This option creates save money of printing or making copies from physical books or reading items. On the other hand, physical reading centers are required by public and to be established in order to carter the people who don’t have online facility and people who don’t like to visit online access. In addition, other activities such as meeting members, sharing own experience among the others can be offered at locations which are vital in the current societies. These kind of culture cannot be obtained from the online platforms. For example, expertise view can not be learned where they talk at the members meeting. In conclusion, government should spend more money to online libraries than wasting money by establishing reading more free centers at cities. As per my opinion, more benefits can be identified from the online access option where anybody can connect at any given time from anywhere around the world.
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rooms in every
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people
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think
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cost
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because
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information
can
be accessed
via
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online
. My point of view is
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government
should invest more
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money
in
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online
platforms than the
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physical
libraries.
However
, review of both options will
be discussed
in the essay.

Due to the rapid improvement of technology and cyber access in the world, accessing the
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information
via
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online
has
been increased
.
Therefore
, more advantages can
be discussed
than the number of disadvantages. I will
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explain
two solid benefits in order to support my opinion of
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online
libraries.
Firstly
,
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online
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information
can
be obtained
at any
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given
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time where
no
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time
frame
is restricted
. And
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physical
libraries
are opened
limited
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time
period.
For example
, if somebody wants to refer the
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some
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details
at mid night which can
be taken
from
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online
where libraries
are closed
at that time.

Secondly
, unlimited books and
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other
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reading
materials can
be accessed
and download facilities are
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allowed
where
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people
can save relevant
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information
at free of charge as E- Booklets. This option creates save
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money
of printing or making copies from
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physical
books or
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reading
items.

On the
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other
hand,
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physical
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reading
centers
are required
by public and to
be established
in order to carter the
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people
who don’t have
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online
facility and
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people
who don’t like to visit
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online
access.
In addition
,
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other
activities such as meeting members, sharing
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own
experience among the others can
be offered
at locations which are vital in the
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current
societies.
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These kind
of culture cannot
be obtained
from the
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online
platforms.
For example
, expertise view can not
be learned
where they talk at the members meeting.

In conclusion
,
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government
should spend more
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money
to
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online
libraries than wasting
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money
by establishing
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reading
more free centers at cities. As per my opinion, more benefits can
be identified
from the
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online
access option where anybody can connect at any
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given
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time
from anywhere around the world.
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IELTS essay Some individuals believe government should implement free reading rooms in every

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
6.0
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