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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A cross-section of people believe nations spend too much funds in preparing individuals to compete on the global stage rather than expending such finances on facilities that the entire society can gain from. In my opinion, i totally agree with this statement, However competing on international sporting events is important. Global recognision is important in terms of sporting activities. When people train, engage and do well in international sporting events they win laurels for their country and also get accolades for thenselves, these brings joy to the people. However, training individuals and participating in every event should not be at the detriment of its citizens, there should be a balance between spending and preparing individuals for world competitions. For instance, In 2005, African tennis tournament, Mali prioritize sending a team instead of building a 1000 Killometres railway but they did not go past the first stage, On the other hand, government should provide better services to its people. As the saying goes health is wealth, when citizens don't have good hospitals, good roads and food to eat no one will be bothered in sporting activities let alone training. Another, drawback of traininig individuals for games is that they usually claim personal glory when they win and sometimes medals are theirs to keep. For example Aruna Kudri of Nigeria chess federation keeps all this trophies and the Nigeria government cannot lay claims to those medals despite spending a lot of money for his preparations. In conclusion, i believe training of individuals for global competition by government is good, but there should be a balance in spending for sport and providing basic amenities.
A cross-section of
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people
believe nations spend too
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much
funds in preparing
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individuals
to compete on the global stage
rather
than expending such finances on facilities that the entire society can gain from. In my opinion,
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i
totally
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agree
with this statement,
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competing on international sporting
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events
is
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important
.

Global
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recognision
is
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important
in terms of sporting activities. When
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people
train, engage and do well in international sporting
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events
they win laurels for their country and
also
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get
accolades for
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thenselves
,
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these brings
joy to the
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people
.
However
, training
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individuals
and participating in every
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event
should not be at the detriment of its citizens, there should be a balance between spending and preparing
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individuals
for world competitions.
For instance
, In 2005, African tennis tournament, Mali prioritize sending a team
instead
of building a 1000
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Killometres
railway
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but
they did not go past the
first
stage,

On the other hand
,
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government
should provide better services to its
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people
. As the saying goes health is wealth, when citizens don't have
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good
hospitals,
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good
roads and food to eat no one will
be bothered
in sporting activities
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let
alone training. Another, drawback of
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traininig
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individuals
for games is that they
usually
claim personal glory when they win and
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sometimes
medals are theirs to
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keep
.
For example
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Aruna
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Kudri
of Nigeria chess federation
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keeps
all
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this
trophies and the Nigeria
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government
cannot lay claims to those medals despite spending
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a lot of
money for his preparations.

In conclusion
,
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i
believe training of
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individuals
for global competition by
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government
is
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good
,
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but
there should be a balance in spending for sport and providing basic amenities.
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IELTS essay Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead.

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