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Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that advertisements are more advantageous to people and organisations. However, others maintain that they leave a negative impact on them. I agree with the later statement and the reasons will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, advertisements form a source of information for people which leaves a major impact on them. To elucidate, when a new product comes into the market, people know about its importance through adverts. These advertisements help people to choose and purchase things which they exactly need. To illustrate, when a brand new phone comes into the market, firms advertises them along with its features and price. Thus, both people and businesses gain huge profit by marketing their products. On the contrary, the advertisements could have a negative impact on people by distracting and persuading them to buy the things which actually they do not need. Moreover, people make it as a matter of status and do not even think twice before purchasing. For instance, people buy a new car by watching the advertisements even when they have one, which is absolutely a waste of money. Additionally, organisations exaggerate the positives sides of their product hiding the negative sides, and the people fall for their marketing tricks and strategies. As a result, people spend a lot of money on unnecessary things instead of saving. It is, therefore, necessary that people should examine each and every product review by themselves without falling prey for their tricks. In conclusion, although advertising the products have great impact on people and firms, there drawbacks could not be neglected. In my opinion, creating awareness among the people outweighs its negative effects.
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often
argued that
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advertisements
are more advantageous to
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people
and
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organisations
.
However
, others maintain that they
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leave
a
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negative
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impact
on them. I
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agree
with the later statement and the reasons will
be discussed
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with,
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advertisements
form a source of information for
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people
which
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leaves
a major
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impact
on them. To elucidate, when a new
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product
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comes
into the market,
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people
know about its importance through adverts. These
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advertisements
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help
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people
to choose and
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purchase
things which they exactly need. To illustrate, when a
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brand new
phone
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comes
into the market, firms advertises them along with its features and price.
Thus
, both
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people
and businesses gain huge profit by marketing their products.

On the contrary
, the
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advertisements
could have a
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negative
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impact
on
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people
by distracting and persuading them to
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buy
the things which actually they do not need.
Moreover
,
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people
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make
it as a matter of status and do not even
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think
twice
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before
purchasing.
For instance
,
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people
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buy
a new car by watching the
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advertisements
even when they have one, which is
absolutely
a waste of money.
Additionally
,
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organisations
exaggerate the positives sides of their
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product
hiding the
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negative
sides, and the
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people
fall for their marketing tricks and strategies.
As a result
,
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people
spend
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a lot of
money on unnecessary things
instead
of saving. It is,
therefore
, necessary that
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people
should examine each and every
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product
review by themselves without falling prey for their tricks.

In conclusion
, although advertising the
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products
have great
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impact
on
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people
and firms, there drawbacks could not
be neglected
. In my opinion, creating awareness among the
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people
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outweighs
its
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negative
effects.
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IELTS essay Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
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