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Being a celebrity such as a famous star or sports personality being problem or

Everyone dreams to be famous and become a celebrity. It comes with a price and the price is your privacy l. Firstly, I will discuss the advantages of being a celebrity. Afterwards, I will talk about disadvantages if you are a star. There is so much of population but not everyone is renowned. If you are a star. It is a big thing. People respect you and idealised you. People star follow you, companies wants you to sale their products l. If you are a celebrity you got chance to visit the world. For instance movies star shoots their movies all over the world. Unfortunately, if you are star, you had no privacy. Where ever you go media and your followers will follow you. Star had power as people believes on them consequently, it being a big responsibility on celebrity. There are several example where a statement from celebrity cost the environment of the country good or bad. It’s hard to spend time alone as celebrity. If star go far away from lime light their career would be over.
Everyone dreams to be
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famous
and become a
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celebrity
. It
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comes
with a price and the price is your privacy l.
Firstly
, I will discuss the advantages of being a
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celebrity
. Afterwards, I will talk about disadvantages if you are a star. There is
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so
much of population
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but
not everyone
is renowned
. If you are a star. It is a
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big
thing.
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People
respect you and
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idealised
you.
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People
star follow you,
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companies
wants you to sale their products l. If you are a
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celebrity
you
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got
chance to visit the world.
For instance
movies star shoots their movies all over the world. Unfortunately, if you are star, you had no privacy. Where ever you go media and your followers will follow you. Star had power as
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people
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believes
on them
consequently
, it being a
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big
responsibility on
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celebrity
. There are
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several example
where a statement from
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celebrity
cost the environment of the country
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good
or
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bad
. It’s
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hard
to spend time alone as
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celebrity
.
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If
star go far away from
This word is usually spelt together: “limelight”.
lime light
their career would be over.

IELTS essay Being a celebrity such as a famous star or sports personality being problem or

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
179 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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