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Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Today's world impact of advertising on people's choice about how they spend heir money on particular product is inevitable. Often it is argued that there are several benefits for humans, while others say it has bad effect on them. From my point of view the negative side outweighed the beneficial one. In general, due to technological advances vast number of advertising merely shift it is place from TV commercial to online, in other word digital market. Of course, it is effective sides is undeniable such as saving time, giving customer chance for comparison about price, quality. For example, in past if a person decided to purchase new product, he/she need to spend a number of effort about where to buy it or which qualification of product differ from other similar ones. As can be expected, it also, demonstrate increase in sales for company. Following, company make a better profit and need and hires more employee which is good for unemployment rate. On other hand, there are a structure behind adds which is about it forces people to buy what they see in advertising, not what they need actually. It can cause a great number of problems in health area both in mental and physical side. For example over usage of fast food and sugar is displayed as a normal habit in ads and it turns to common health issues such as diabetes and obesity especially among the children. What is more is it even have a result on people such as spending much more money than income and in that case, people face with financial crisis. To conclude, Although advertisements have demerits such as they help people updated with new items and give them employment. On the contrary it has also a number of drawbacks like it badly manipulate their minds.
Today
's world impact of advertising on
people
's choice about how they spend heir money on particular product is inevitable.
Often
it
is argued
that there are several benefits for humans, while others say it has
bad
effect on them. From my point of view the
negative
side outweighed the beneficial one.
In general
, due to technological advances vast
number
of advertising
merely
shift it is place from TV commercial to online, in
other
word digital market.
Of course
, it is effective sides is undeniable such as saving time, giving customer chance for comparison about price, quality.
For example
, in past if a person decided to
purchase
new product, he/she need to spend a
number
of effort about where to
buy
it or which qualification of product differ from
other
similar ones. As can be
expected
, it
also
, demonstrate increase in sales for
company
. Following,
company
make
a better profit and need and hires more employee which is
good
for unemployment rate.

On
other
hand, there are a structure behind
adds
which is about it forces
people
to
buy
what they
see
in advertising, not what they need actually. It can cause a great
number
of problems in health area both in mental and physical side.
For example
over usage of
fast
food and sugar
is displayed
as a normal habit in ads and it turns to common health issues such as diabetes and obesity
especially
among the children.
What is more
is it even have a result on
people
such as spending much more money than income and
in that case
,
people
face with financial crisis.

To conclude
, Although advertisements have demerits such as they
help
people
updated with new items and give them employment.
On the contrary
it has
also
a
number
of drawbacks like it
badly
manipulate their minds.
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IELTS essay Some feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative.

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