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Some feel that it is up to people to be fit and bear their healthcare expenses, On the other hand, others feel that it the government that should fulfill the healthcare needs. Argue both the views and provide reasons with examples.

Some feel that it is up to people to be fit and bear their healthcare expenses, On the other hand, others feel that it the government that should fulfill the healthcare needs. Argue both the views and provide reasons with examples. oaBq
As populations soar and disease rates follow, health has become a concern for many people. On the one hand, there is the belief that it is up to individuals to keep themselves in good shape, while a contrary view holds that this is the government's role. This essay will consider both of these perspectives. These days, many people would argue that how well we are able largely, if not entirely, dependent on the actions and decisions we take personally. Undeniably, many of us live in societies where the individual does have a considerable degree of control over what happens to them. In Australia, for instance, citizens have access to a vast array of products and services, including gym memberships, nutritionists, and fitness groups, all of which encourage good health and well-being. Although illness in a number of cases are unavoidable, in such fortunate nations, citizens can and should manage their health to some extent. This concept of personal responsibility is often countered by those who understand that many people do not have the education or financial capacity to look after their health. For those who are merely managing to put food on the table and a roof over their heads, health services provided to them by the government is an essential aspect. These could include free medical checkups and hospital treatment, access to affordable medication and advice on a wide range of health-related issues, to name a few. Without such a safety net underpinning public health, even citizens in wealthy nations would struggle. In conclusion, without an easy-to-access and inexpensive healthcare system funded by the government, individuals would fail to look after their health properly. At the same time, each person needs to prioritize their well-being, which they can do by accessing the wide choice of products and services.
As populations soar and disease rates follow,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
has become a concern for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. On the one hand, there is the belief that it is up to individuals to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
themselves in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
shape, while a contrary view holds that this is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's role. This essay will consider both of these perspectives.

These days,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would argue that how well we are able
largely
, if not
entirely
, dependent on the actions and decisions we take
personally
.
Undeniably
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of us
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in societies where the individual does have a considerable degree of control over what happens to them. In Australia,
for instance
, citizens have access to a vast array of products and services, including gym memberships, nutritionists, and fitness groups, all of which encourage
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
and well-being. Although illness in a number of cases are unavoidable, in such fortunate nations, citizens can and should manage their
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health
to
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some
extent.

This concept of personal responsibility is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
countered by those who understand that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do not have the education or financial capacity to look after their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
. For those who are
merely
managing to put food on the table and a roof over their heads,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
services provided to them by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
is an essential aspect. These could include free medical checkups and hospital treatment, access to affordable medication and advice on a wide range of health-related issues, to name a few. Without such a safety net underpinning public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
, even citizens in wealthy nations would struggle.

In conclusion
, without an easy-to-access and inexpensive healthcare system funded by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, individuals would fail to look after their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
properly
. At the same time, each person needs to prioritize their well-being, which they can do by accessing the wide choice of products and services.
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IELTS essay Some feel that it is up to people to be fit and bear their healthcare expenses, On the other hand, others feel that it the government that should fulfill the healthcare needs. Argue both the views and provide reasons with examples.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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