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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. In this essay, I will explain why social skills are more vital, compared with academic qualifications. The merits of outstanding social skills are apparent. Firstly, communication is the key to career success in this day and age. This is mainly due to the fact that the 21 century is best characterised by constant interaction with different people, no matter the communication happens in person or online. Secondly, the ability to sell products or services is of paramount significance in any business – this requires strong social skills. For example, an employee with excellent social skills is able to have an impact in front of customers or clients; as a result, products or services can be perceived as high-value. Furthermore, employees with better social skills are generally more easy-going, which is very important to the workplace, including the employer. After all, as the saying goes, “Who you work with is as important as what you do. ” – An enjoyable work environment needs socially skilful employees. In contrast, some others may claim that academic qualifications are the pre-requisite of employment. Apparently, many positions require certain qualifications. However, in modern-day society, more and more employers have realised that whether employees can get the results that the business wants is the key to a business’ success. It can be seen that qualifications do not play a key role in this regard. Having considered both views, I think employees’ social skills are of overriding importance for an organisation. Also, I would suggest employers consider job applicants’ social skills first, which I believe is soundly based on the above reasoning I have presented.
There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether job

applicants’
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qualifications
. In this essay, I will
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explain
why
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are more vital, compared with academic qualifications.

The merits of outstanding
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social
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skills
are apparent.
Firstly
, communication is the key to

career success in this day and age. This is
mainly
due to the fact that the
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is

best
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characterised
by constant interaction with
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people
, no matter the communication happens in person or online.
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, the ability to sell products or services is of paramount significance in any business
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–
this requires strong
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skills
.
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employee
with excellent
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social
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skills
is able to have an impact in front of customers or clients;
as a result
, products or services can
be perceived
as high-value.
Furthermore
,
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employees
with better
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are
generally
more easy-going, which is
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important
to the workplace, including the employer.
After all
, as the saying goes, “Who you work with is as
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important
as what you do. ”
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skilful
employees.

In contrast
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others may claim that academic
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qualifications
are the
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of employment.
Apparently
,
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positions require certain
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qualifications
.
However
, in

modern-day society, more and more employers have
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realised
that whether
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employees
can
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get
the results that the business wants is the key to a business’ success. It can be
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seen
that
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qualifications
do not play a key role in this regard.

Having considered both views, I
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think
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employees’
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are of overriding

importance for an
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organisation
.
Also
, I would suggest employers consider job applicants’
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first
, which I believe is
soundly
based on the above reasoning I have presented.
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IELTS essay Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. with this opinion?

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