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Personal Statement: Explain if you want to study abroad and what are your reasons for it. Please, write about your choice of study programme and how it is important for your future career plans.

Some people hold the view that an increasingly high number of people have been making a great effort to study in a foreign country. There might be several reasons why many people and I feel that it is more beneficial to study abroad. There are a host of educational reasons for leaving my country and study abroad. To start with, it is logically true that a person can sharpen his or her knowledge through practicing. For example, although I passed an IELTS exam and got a good score of 7, I believe that i have an opportunity to practice all things I have learned so far. In this way, I can even gain a new language, taking courses going far from home. It would be quite easy as I will dwell with native speakers of that country and I highly likely learn that language easily by making conversations with them. Moreover, in comparison with our traditional teaching system, it is crystal clear that foreign universities are more experienced in educating students. This is due to the fact that they involve professors who are experts in their fields. These people will help me acquire new skills, which might be helpful for me in the long run. Although they possess their own style of teaching students, I hold the perception that all of them are specialists. Their approaches can be daunting, but I think it will assist to open my mind to innovative ways of gaining knowledge. Not only these are what I can learn in a foreign country, but also I highly likely face different cultures and I may gain a greater knowledge of them. If I gain a global mind-set, it may allow me to back up arguments as well as informing my beliefs. A foreign diploma can bring tremendous benefits on the subject of employment. If I become an international student, my experience of living internationally will highly likely goes down well with numerous employers. For instance, I will be able to deal with a high number of people from different cultures and I am expected to cope with a higher level of adaptability. These abilities of mine will also look good on my CV. Once I will have finished my studies abroad, I tend to be looked on favorably by the vast majority of employers. My aim is to further my studies in information technology. Since the 21st century has necessitated to study this field for several aspects, I am also highly encouraged to do this. If I learn how to complete my work on computer, it seems indisputable that I will find a good job in the near future. This is mostly because many employers are searching workers who are able to cope with new changes in technology. In my opinion, being provided with this job holds an indispensable position for leading a perfect life. Software developers, for example, earn more than most of the people who are working in other jobs in my country. It is statistically true that it will become a must to study this field, even in kindergartens to teach children. Hence, I am planning to work in IT, which makes me feel happy as I am quite keen on learning new technologies. In terms of my life in a foreign country, it is true that I will go through a lot of life lessons. During my university life, I will be able to meet a diverse range of people, among whom I can make lifelong friends. I can discover myself through various ways, which helps me gain independence. I feel that self-reliance holds an integral part in becoming a well-rounded individual. After I will move back, I may rely less on others, taking more responsibility for myself. As I am interested in adventure, I try to go picturesque cities and want to spend my spare time looking at a breathtaking view. Not only I will allocate my leisure time to study more, but also I will make an attempt to explore new places as well as discovering exciting meals. I will grow there and I think I will appreciate my home and family more at that time. As I am hoped to earn money on my own, I will then realize the importance of spending money responsibly. To conclude, studying abroad can bring me benefits in three ways: education, work and life. I will learn to organize my life and deal with everyday challenges by becoming independent and self-sufficient. It would be also an unforgettable experience for me, which is the major step in life that will help me live without stumbling later.
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and
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study
abroad. To
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with, it is
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true that a person can sharpen
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his or her
knowledge through practicing.
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have an opportunity to practice all things I have learned
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, I can even
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language, taking courses going far from home. It would be quite easy as I will dwell with native speakers of that
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universities are more experienced in educating students.
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me acquire
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skills
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style of teaching students, I
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the perception that all of them are specialists. Their approaches can be daunting,
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I
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it will assist to open my mind to innovative
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of gaining knowledge. Not
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these are what I can
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learn
in a
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foreign
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,
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likely face
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cultures and I may
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a greater knowledge of them. If I
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a global mind-set, it may
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allow
me to back up arguments
as well
as informing my beliefs.

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foreign
diploma can bring tremendous benefits on the subject of employment. If I become an international student, my experience of living
internationally
will
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likely
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goes
down well with numerous employers.
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people
from
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cultures and
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expected
to cope with a higher level of adaptability. These abilities of mine will
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look
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good
on my CV. Once I will have finished my
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studies
abroad, I tend to
be looked
on
favorably
by the vast majority of employers.

My aim is to
further
my
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studies
in information technology. Since the 21st century has necessitated to
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study
this field for several aspects, I am
also
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highly
encouraged to do this. If I
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learn
how to complete my work on computer, it seems indisputable that I will find a
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good
job in the near future. This is
mostly
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because
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many
employers are searching workers who are able to cope with
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changes
in technology. In my opinion,
being provided
with this job
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holds
an indispensable position for leading a perfect
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life
. Software developers,
for example
, earn more than most of the
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people
who are working in other jobs in my
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country
. It is
statistically
true that it will become a
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must
to
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study
this field, even in kindergartens to teach children.
Hence
, I am planning to work in IT, which
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makes
me feel happy as I am quite keen on learning
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new
technologies.

In terms of my
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life
in a
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foreign
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country
, it is true that I will go through
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a lot of
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life
lessons. During my university
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life
, I will be able to
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meet
a diverse range of
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people
, among whom I can
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make
lifelong friends. I can discover myself through various
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ways
, which
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helps
me
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gain
independence. I feel that self-reliance
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holds
an integral part in becoming a well-rounded individual. After I will
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move
back, I may rely less on others, taking more responsibility for myself. As I
am interested
in adventure, I try to go picturesque cities and want to spend my spare time looking at a breathtaking view. Not
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I will allocate my leisure time to
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more,
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there and
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I will appreciate my home and family more at that time. As I
am hoped
to earn money on my
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, I will then realize the importance of spending money
responsibly
.

To conclude
, studying abroad can bring me benefits in three
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ways
: education, work and
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life
. I will
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learn
to organize my
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life
and deal with everyday challenges by becoming independent and self-sufficient. It would be
also
an unforgettable experience for me, which is the major step in
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life
that will
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help
me
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live
without stumbling later.
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IELTS essay Personal Statement: Explain if you want to study abroad and what are your reasons for it. Please, write about your choice of study programme and how it is important for your future career plans.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
771 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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