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Some employer think that formal academic qualification are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for an employer why is it the case it is a positive or negative development

Some employer think that formal academic qualification are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for an employer why is it the case it is a positive or negative development PJRE
Nowadays, the educated people's ratio is far large than uneducated peoples. Few employers believe that a university degree is more valuable than life experience and personal qualities. This essay will explain why this phenomenon is creating a positive impact. It is described in the following paragraphs. There are plenty of reasons, which push me to think this statement is beneficial for society. First and foremost, the salary rate is high for an educated employer because educated employers can handle situations very smoothly, which is a plus point for a company. And the salary amount attracts people. They think a degree is more important to them. For example, all employers went the government jobs because that empower enough money, therefore they earn a degree or certificate. On the same hand, if any employers have a degree that indicates persons have reasonable knowledge about their field. But, personal quality can not define that person can do any work accurately. Academic qualification is the symbol of information of related field, which will help to develop any industries or factories. For example, big companies such as Tesla, Apple, and many more are hire educated employers who will help their companies to develop in the upcoming years. To conclude, personal skill and quality is important but not as much as education. Employers who have a degree can control the situation decently. The salary of that employer is high, which attracts other people to focus more on education. All in all, a degree has more value rather than personal skills or experience.
Nowadays, the
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educated
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people
's ratio is far
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large
than uneducated peoples. Few
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employers
believe that a university
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degree
is more valuable than life experience and
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personal
qualities. This essay will
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explain
why this phenomenon is creating a
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positive
impact. It is
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described
in the following paragraphs.

There are
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plenty
of reasons, which push me to
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think
this statement is beneficial for society.
First
and foremost, the salary rate is high for an
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educated
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employer
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because
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educated
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employers
can handle situations
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very
smoothly
, which is a plus point for a
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company
. And the salary amount attracts
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people
. They
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think
a
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degree
is more
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important
to them.
For example
, all
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employers
went the
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government
jobs
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because
that empower
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enough
money,
therefore
they earn a
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degree
or certificate.

On the same hand, if any
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employers
have a
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degree
that indicates persons have reasonable knowledge about their field.
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But
,
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personal
quality can not define that person can do any work
accurately
. Academic qualification is the symbol of information of related field, which will
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help
to develop any industries or factories.
For example
,
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big
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companies
such as Tesla, Apple, and
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many
more are hire
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educated
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employers
who will
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help
their
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companies
to develop in the upcoming years.

To conclude
,
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personal
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skill
and quality is
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important
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but
not as much as education.
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Employers
who have a
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degree
can control the situation
decently
. The salary of that
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employer
is high, which attracts other
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people
to focus more on education. All in all, a
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degree
has more value
rather
than
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personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
or experience.
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IELTS essay Some employer think that formal academic qualification are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for an employer why is it the case it is a positive or negative development

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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