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In many cities, many peopole are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

In many cities, many peopole are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages? bnxl
Thanks to the modern amenities provided by large residential apartments many people prefer them to detached houses. In my opinion, the benefits of living in apartment blocks outweigh its drawbacks. According to a recent survey apartments improve the living standard of its residents. This is because most of the flats are situated at the heart of the cities where people can have easy access to all the modern amenities. Obviously, these advanced facilities help people to broaden their social reach. Furthermore, apartments are close to schools, offices and hospitals and hence staying in them makes life more convenient for residents. They do not have to travel long distances to get to work or school. This saves both time and money for them. Another important advantage of living in an apartment complex is that it provides a sense of security to the residents. Apartments are safer than stand alone homes in many aspects. First of all, entering this gated community is quite difficult for an outsider due to the presence of multiple gates. Apart from this, advanced security surveillance cameras are installed and security officers employed to monitor and check the activities of visitors. That prevents burglars and other offenders from entering apartments and makes residents safe. Perhaps the biggest downside of living in an apartment is the space constraints. Apartments are smaller but compared to the many advantages they offer, this is a negligible disadvantage. In conclusion, although there are some disadvantages to living in multi-storey buildings, I think they provide more security and convenience. These are also reasons that encourage more and more people to choose them.
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prefer them to detached
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. In my opinion, the benefits of
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blocks outweigh its drawbacks.

According to a recent survey
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living
standard of its
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residents
. This is
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are situated
at the heart of the cities where
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people
can have easy access to all the modern amenities.
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, these advanced facilities
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to broaden their social reach.
Furthermore
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are close to
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schools
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. They do not
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to work or school. This saves both time and money for them.

Another
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advantage of
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complex is that it provides a sense of
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security
to the
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residents
.
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aspects.
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, entering this gated community is quite difficult for an outsider due to the presence of multiple gates. Apart from this, advanced
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surveillance cameras
are installed
and
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officers employed to monitor and
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the activities of visitors. That
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prevents
burglars and other offenders from entering
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apartments
and
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makes
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safe. Perhaps the biggest downside of
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living
in an
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apartment
is the space constraints.
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Apartments
are smaller
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compared to the
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many
advantages they offer, this is a negligible disadvantage.

In conclusion
, although there are
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multi-storey
buildings, I
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they provide more
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security
and convenience. These are
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people
to choose them.
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IELTS essay In many cities, many peopole are living in large apartment blocks. Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages?

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