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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public places while some have no intention of doing this.

Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public places while some have no intention of doing this. KyLEN
Some nations in recent times have banned tobacco smoking in the streets while some are not planning to do the same. This essay wîll discuss the ideas causing this dichotomy among countries and state my opinion. Perhaps the major reason why some countries have decided to place an embargo on tobacco consumption in public is due to its health hazards to the smokers themselves and to passive smokers. For instance, it is documented by a medical journal that 90 percent of lung cancers occur in passive smokers. Furthermore, tobacco smoking in open places can cause air pollution and increased susceptibility to fire-outbreaks which in turn can lead to loss of lives and properties. On the contrary, some countries have left the other side of this debate untouched because they believe in citizens being free to make thier choices. Some producing companies in such countries have decided to place the label 'smokers are liable to die young' on thier adverts, so that thier customers can make informed choices. Such countries may also take this position in order to preserve employments and also to sustain the producing company's economy. Otherwise, the later runs bankrupt and the former are lost. For instance, in countries like Sweden where tobacco smoking was banned, a reduction of about 20 percent per annum was observed in the country's income, this translates to a major loss. Therefore, it will be logical to say that in as much as smoking of tobacco in social places has deleterious effects such as respiratory diseases, environmental pollution, higher incidents of fire explosion, l will like to take sides with countries that has remained silent on this issue because restriction will impact negatively on the country's economy and will also culminate in the breech of human freedom.
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tobacco
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smoking
in the streets while
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some
are not planning to do the same. This essay
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ideas
causing this dichotomy among
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countries
and state my opinion.

Perhaps the major reason why
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some
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countries
have decided to
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place
an embargo on
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tobacco
consumption in public is due to its health hazards to the smokers themselves and to passive smokers.
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, it
is documented
by a medical journal that 90 percent of lung cancers occur in passive smokers.
Furthermore
,
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tobacco
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smoking
in open
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places
can cause air pollution and increased susceptibility to fire-outbreaks which in turn can lead to loss of
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lives
and properties.

On the contrary
,
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some
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countries
have
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left
the other side of this debate untouched
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because
they believe in citizens being free to
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make
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choices.
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Some
producing
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companies
in such
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countries
have decided to
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place
the label 'smokers are liable to
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die
young' on
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adverts,
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that
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customers can
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make
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countries
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also
to sustain the producing
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company
's economy.
Otherwise
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later
runs bankrupt and the former
are lost
.
For instance
, in
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countries
like Sweden where
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tobacco
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smoking
was banned
, a reduction of about 20 percent per annum
was observed
in the country's income, this translates to a major loss.

Therefore
, it will be logical to say that in as much as
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smoking
of
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tobacco
in social
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places
has deleterious effects such as respiratory diseases, environmental pollution, higher incidents of fire explosion, l will like to take sides with
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countries
that has remained silent on this issue
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because
restriction will impact
negatively
on the country's economy and will
also
culminate in the breech of human freedom.
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IELTS essay Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public places while some have no intention of doing this.

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  American English
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294 words
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