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Some countries pay extremely high salary to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries.

Some countries pay extremely high salary to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries. NWraN
It is an undeniable truth that nowadays many workers working in the national and multinational firms. Some nations always give more wages to employees. It is believed by numerous human beings that labours should be given limited salary. So, I against this view because there are a plethora of reasons which I shall discuss in the following paragraphs. To begin with, high salary is vital for both the worker's personal growth and the economy of the country. In other words, due to much salary the workers can fulfil their all wishes and provide medical ammunities from the hospital to their family members so that they can live healthy lifestyle. And, they pay the tax to the national authority as well. As a result, the GDP would be escalated significantly. Moreover, on owning to high pay employees who work in any industry increase not only the level of their confidence but also the production in the firm. To epitome, an employee always try to produce more production and that is how, they get more salary along with the incentive and other allowances such as house rent, food allowance and so on. On the other hand, there are some drawbacks of providing high money to labours. First of all, workers do not put their efforts properly while working because of high salary as they are attracted to their salary only. Last but not least, giving high salary to every workers is not beneficial for employers because it is totally depended on their work, qualification and their level of work. For instance, top level workers should be given high pay scale than the bottom level workers. All in all, undoubtedly high pay scale always leads many advantages for employees and employers but it should be depended on their work.
It is an undeniable truth that nowadays
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working in the national and multinational firms.
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nations always give more wages to
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employees
. It
is believed
by numerous human beings that
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labours
should be
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limited
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salary
.
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So
, I against this view
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because
there are a plethora of reasons which I shall discuss in the following paragraphs.

To
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high
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is vital for both the worker's personal growth and the economy of the country.
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much
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salary
the
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workers
can fulfil their all wishes and provide medical
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ammunities
from the hospital to their family members
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so
that they can
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live
healthy lifestyle. And, they
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pay
the tax to the national authority
as well
.
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, the GDP would
be escalated
significantly
.

Moreover
, on owning to
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high
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pay
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employees
who
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work
in any industry increase not
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level
of their confidence
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also
the production in the firm. To epitome, an
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employee
always try to produce more production and
that is
how, they
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get
more
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salary
along with the incentive and other allowances such as
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house
rent, food allowance and
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on.

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, there are
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drawbacks of providing
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high
money to
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labours
.
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First of all
,
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do not put their efforts
properly
while working
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of
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as they
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to their
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salary
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. Last
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not least, giving
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to every
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is not beneficial for employers
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, qualification and their
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, top
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level
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workers
should be
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high
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pay
scale than the bottom
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workers.

All in all,
undoubtedly
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high
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pay
scale always leads
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many
advantages for
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employees
and employers
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it should
be depended
on their
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IELTS essay Some countries pay extremely high salary to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
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