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Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries? v.1

Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries? v. 1
Some people are of the opinion that we should focus more on the present rather than making plans for the future. From my perspective, while this argument can be explained for some reasons, I would argue that planning is of paramount importance in the success of any person, and therefore I completely disagree with this statement. People who advocate this idea cite the living-for-the-moment way of life as their ideology. Preparations and arrangements are deemed too complicated for them, and some even think that having a plan is tantamount to giving ourselves unnecessary concerns. However, I find this argument somewhat flawed, since planning ahead is far from synonymous with excessive worrying. Good planners see planning as a facilitator to their future goals, rather than a complication that stands in the course of personal development. Furthermore, I believe that future planning is what makes a person successful in life. Good preparations give a person an edge over impulsive, disoriented ones, and indeed, no big corporations would run well without well thought-out, elaborate schemes. Also, good planning helps people minimize uncertainties. Success stories of famous entrepreneurs and politicians all pinpoint the need for a careful, detailed plan. In times of crisis, a person or an organization with great predictions of as many potential problems as possible always triumphs over those without good planning. In conclusion, my firm conviction is that careful planning for the future is never an unnecessary burden. It is one of the most important attributes constituting success. It is not an overstatement to say that if one fails to plan, they plan to fail.
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rather
than making
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plans
for the
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future
. From my perspective, while this argument can be
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reasons, I would argue that
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planning
is of paramount importance in the success of any
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I completely disagree with this statement.

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People
who advocate this
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cite the living-for-the-moment way of life as their ideology. Preparations and arrangements
are deemed
too complicated for them, and
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some
even
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think
that having a
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plan
is tantamount to giving ourselves unnecessary concerns.
However
, I find this argument somewhat flawed, since
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planning
ahead is far from synonymous with excessive worrying.
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planners
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planning
as a facilitator to their
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future
goals,
rather
than a complication that stands in the course of personal development.

Furthermore
, I believe that
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is what
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makes
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successful in life.
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preparations give a
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person
an edge over impulsive, disoriented ones, and
indeed
, no
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big
corporations would run well without well
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-out, elaborate schemes.
Also
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helps
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people
minimize uncertainties. Success stories of
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famous
entrepreneurs and politicians all pinpoint the need for a careful, detailed
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plan
. In times of crisis, a
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person
or an organization with great predictions of as
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many
potential problems as possible always triumphs over those without
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good
planning.

In conclusion
, my firm conviction is that careful
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planning
for the
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future
is never an unnecessary burden. It is one of the most
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important
attributes constituting success. It is not an overstatement to say that if one fails to
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plan
, they
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plan
to fail.
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IELTS essay Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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