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Some claim men are more naturally more competitive than women. How far do you agree or disagree?

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In this concurrent world, due to increase in globalization employment rate is increasing day by day. Some people believe that men are more naturally more competitive than their counter parts. If questioned, I agree with this notion. My preference is explained further in the ensuring paragraphs. There are many reasons for my agreement. The foremost one is orthodox and stereo type mentality is responsible. In other words, owing to this type of mentality, in the early age children to be taught like men should be do outdoor works, while have to do household work, which leads people give more opportunity to men. Furthermore, psychologically men are more stronger. Women have a motherhood nature and they are more emotional, so men’s are more strong in terms of their work and family life.
In this concurrent world, due to increase in globalization employment rate is increasing day by day.
Some
people
believe that
men
are more
naturally
more competitive than their
counter parts
. If questioned, I
agree
with this notion. My preference is
explained
further
in the ensuring paragraphs. There are
many
reasons for my agreement. The foremost one is orthodox and stereo type mentality is responsible.
In other words
, owing to this type of mentality, in the early age children to
be taught
like
men
should be
do
outdoor works, while
have to
do household work, which leads
people
give more opportunity to
men
.
Furthermore
,
psychologically
men
are
more stronger
. Women have a motherhood
nature and
they are more emotional,
so
men’s
are more strong in terms of their work and family life.
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IELTS essay Some claim men are more naturally more competitive than women. How far

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