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Some children find some subjects as mathematics and philosophy are too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Undeniably, education is an essential thing for everyone. This is the only thing which helps us to survive in a long run of life. However, a number of children say that some subjects like Mathematics and Philosophy are too hard to study, that's why some individuals said that those subjects should not be compulsory for students. I agree to some extent to this statement. The following are the points which will elaborate my viewpoint. To commence with, i believe that all subjects are important for the students because they provide essential knowledge. But some subjects are boring like Philosophy. This subject is helpful for thosr students who want to pursue their future study in that field.
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like Mathematics and Philosophy are too
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individuals said that those
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extent to this statement. The following are the points which will elaborate my viewpoint.

To commence with,
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believe that all
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for the students
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because
they provide essential knowledge.
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But
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some
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are boring like Philosophy. This
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students who want to pursue their future study in that field.

IELTS essay Some children find some subjects as mathematics and philosophy are too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory.

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