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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most people believe in the saying that "The teenagers are the hope of the future" it was quoted by The Philippines national hero. Requiring them to provide community service with their excess time can give an advantage for both the teenagers and the community. With this essay i will provide some examples that will show how i strongly agree with this. Young adults, the next generation of leaders, we must plant to their mind and soul the love for their nation. We must start early showing them what can they give to their neighborhood even at young age. For example, back in the Philippines we have the so called " Sanggunian Kabataan" translated as Association for Youths. This is a part of local government election are also initiated every 6 years, with regards to this the government are empowering them by providing local projects that can help the youths in the community. Furthermore, this extra-curricular activity that helps those kids can also divert their attetion against drugs and alcohol. They become more resourceful, they can express themselves through arts that can benefit beautified the community. In my personal view, I strongly believe that they must be required for providing service to the local government without pay, we must show them the love for their peoples doesn't need to have monetary equivalent. And with this we start to embed them the sense of responsibility to the nation, to their community and to the people around them.
Most
people
believe in the saying that
"
The
teenagers
are the hope of the future
"
it
was quoted
by The Philippines national hero. Requiring them to provide
community
service with their excess time can give an advantage for both the
teenagers
and the
community
. With this essay
i
will provide
some
examples that will
show
how
i
strongly
agree
with this. Young adults, the
next
generation of leaders, we
must
plant to their mind and soul the
love
for their nation. We
must
start
early showing them what can they give to their neighborhood even at young age.
For example
, back in the Philippines we have the
so
called
"
Sanggunian
Kabataan
"
translated as Association for Youths. This is a part of local
government
election are
also
initiated every 6 years,
with regards to
this the
government
are empowering them by providing local projects that can
help
the youths in the
community
.
Furthermore
, this extra-curricular activity that
helps
those kids can
also
divert their
attetion
against drugs and alcohol. They become more resourceful, they can express themselves through arts that can benefit beautified the
community
. In my personal view, I
strongly
believe that they
must
be required
for providing service to the local
government
without pay, we
must
show
them the
love
for their peoples doesn't need to have monetary equivalent. And with this we
start
to embed them the sense of responsibility to the nation, to their
community
and to the
people
around them.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well.

Essay
  American English
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245 words
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