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Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion. v.4

Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion. v. 4
Nowadays, some offices have created " Smoking Free Zone" areas, while some government offices have completely made smoking illegal in public areas. Though some people consider it too strict, however as per others it is commendable. From my perspective for an individual' s health and surroundings, it should be mandatory not to smoke in public areas. For instance, smoking causes several side effects, which are injurious to health. it has widely seen that people who smoke regularly have a high probability of developing lung cancer, which is still not entirely curable. The treatment for cancer is very expensive and there is no certainty that the patient will be able to recover. Moreover, people who smoke regularly generally have puffy eyes, bad skin, and the appearance of an unhealthy individual. In addition to this, smoking does not only affect the individual but also to people who are nearby. This particular phenomenon is called " passive smoking" , which has equal chances of causing diseases related to the heart and lungs. In the public area, there are adults, young children, and pregnant women as well. If someone is smoking on the premises, people around that smoking individual also at higher risk. As a result, smoking affects the health of people who are nearby. Additionally, smoking also causes air pollution, which affects our environment as well. In the nutshell, to reduce the effect of smoking, for people' s health and environment, it is advisable that smoking should be prohibited completely from public areas. Government and authorities should encourage people to refrain from smoking and educate them about the harmful sides of smoking.
Nowadays,
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offices have created
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Smoking
Free
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areas
, while
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some
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government
offices have completely made
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smoking
illegal in
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public
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areas
. Though
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some
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people
consider it too strict,
however
as per others it is commendable. From my perspective for an
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individual&
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health
and surroundings, it should be mandatory not to smoke in
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public
areas.

For instance
,
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smoking
causes several side effects, which are injurious to
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health
.
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it
has
widely
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seen
that
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people
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who
smoke
regularly
have a high probability of developing lung cancer, which is
still
not
entirely
curable. The treatment for cancer is
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very
expensive and there is no certainty that the patient will be able to recover.
Moreover
,
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people
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who
smoke
regularly
generally
have puffy eyes,
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bad
skin, and the appearance of an unhealthy individual.

In addition
to this,
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smoking
does not
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only
affect the individual
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but
also
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people
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who
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is called
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,
which has equal chances of causing diseases related to the heart and lungs. In the
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public
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area
, there are adults, young children, and pregnant women
as well
. If someone is
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smoking
on the premises,
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people
around that
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smoking
individual
also
at higher
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risk
.
As a result
,
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smoking
affects the
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health
of
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people
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who
are nearby.
Additionally
,
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smoking
also
causes air pollution, which affects our environment
as well
.

In the nutshell, to
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reduce
the effect of
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smoking
, for
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people&
#039; s
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health
and environment, it is advisable that
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smoking
should
be prohibited
completely from
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public
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areas
.
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Government
and authorities should encourage
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people
to refrain from
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smoking
and educate them about the harmful sides of
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smoking
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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