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Some believe that people will purchase a product based on their needs and advertising is not needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many have argued that consumers purchase products due to their needs and advertisements are not necessary. I completely disagree with this statement because ads give consumers information about the quality of products wich they want to buy. First of all, advertisements are the main key for brands to reach their target in order to sell their products. Therefore, companies habitually try to creat ads according to their customers' interests by finding what attracts their buyers the most. For example, If the car brand Lada aims to be sold its new car to the people, the brand will make a short TV commercial to advertise its new product. Secondly, advertisements inform us about the choices we have because there are many options in the market in different fields which being offered by varied brands, which of them sell the most depends on the number of ads the customers being revealed. For instance, If a new drink brand is come to the market where many equivalences of this product already exist and If people see the new one on TV ads or at the bus stop, they will want to purchase the new one next time. In conclusion, while some people think that advertisements are useless, I believe that the advertisements are the most important tools in order to selling products because by using ads, brands can easily reach their target group.
Nowadays,
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many
have argued that consumers
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purchase
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products
due to their needs and
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advertisements
are not necessary. I completely disagree with this statement
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because
ads give consumers information about the quality of
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products
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wich
they want to
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buy
.
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First of all
,
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advertisements
are the main key for
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brands
to reach their target in order to sell their
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products
.
Therefore
,
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companies
habitually
try to
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creat
ads according to their customers' interests by finding what attracts their buyers the most.
For example
, If the car
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brand
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Lada
aims to
be sold
its
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new
car to the
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people
, the
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brand
will
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make
a short TV commercial to advertise its
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new
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product
.
Secondly
,
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advertisements
inform us about the choices we have
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because
there are
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many
options in the market in
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different
fields which
being offered
by varied
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brands
, which of them sell the most depends on the number of ads the customers
being revealed
.
For instance
, If a
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new
drink
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brand
is
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come
to the market where
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many
equivalences of this
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product
already exist and If
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people
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see
the
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new
one on TV ads or at the bus
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stop
, they will want to
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purchase
the
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new
one
next
time.
In conclusion
, while
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some
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people
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think
that
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advertisements
are useless, I believe that the
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advertisements
are the most
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important
tools in order to selling
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products
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because
by using ads,
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brands
can
easily
reach their target group.
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IELTS essay Some believe that people will purchase a product based on their needs and advertising is not needed.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
231 words
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