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Some believe that it is good for a country’s culture to import films and TV programmes, while others think it is better for a country to have their own films and tv programmes. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. v.1

Some believe that it is good for a country’s culture to import films and TV programmes, while others think it is better for a country to have their own films and tv programmes. v. 1
There are many factors can cause; many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession, these factors are; lack of communication skill, inability to adapt to a new culture, missing practical skill, skill set not matched with current standards. If the universities willing to improve their courses, this issue will be resolved. The unemployment rate has been increased and one of its major cause is because many people's graduated from the universities were unable to work in their chosen field. One of the most common reason is lack of communication skill may lead to confusion between the recruiters and a student. In addition, as a professional you should have a good communication skill which may guide you through several issues in communicate with the other people, for example; an ability to overcome the psychological barrier, and how to make a better public image. Even though, this could be done by the students to learn the required skills by themselves, but if the university taking a major role in facilitating these courses, hence, this will help the students to achieve their skills at a cheaper price. However, the students should will need to develop a good personality, because the recruiters will not only focus on the ability but also the behaviour of their candidate. In summary, even graduated students are facing the difficulties in finding a job nowadays, this is still a good reason for the students to learn more, as well as, the university could see this as a chance to upgrade their courses to meet with the new standard and demand of the labour market.
There are
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factors can cause;
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many
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university
graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession, these factors are; lack of communication
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skill
, inability to adapt to a new culture, missing practical
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skill
,
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skill
set not matched with
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current
standards. If the
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universities
willing to
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improve
their courses, this issue will
be resolved
.

The unemployment rate has
been increased
and one of its major cause is
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because
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many
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people
's graduated from the
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universities
were unable to work in their chosen field. One of the most common
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reason
is lack of communication
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skill
may lead to confusion between the recruiters and a
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student
.
In addition
, as a professional you should have a
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good
communication
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skill
which may guide you through several issues in communicate with the other
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people
,
for example
; an ability to overcome the psychological barrier, and how to
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make
a better public image.

Even though
, this could
be done
by the
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students
to learn the required
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skills
by themselves,
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but
if the
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university
taking a major role in facilitating these courses,
hence
, this will
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help
the
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students
to achieve their
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skills
at a cheaper price.
However
, the
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students
Two modal verbs connected. Did you mean: "should, will", "should" or "will"?
should will
need to develop a
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good
personality,
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because
the recruiters will not
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only
focus on the ability
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but
also
the
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behaviour
of their candidate.

In summary, even graduated
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students
are facing the difficulties in finding a job nowadays, this is
still
a
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good
reason for the
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students
to learn more,
as well
as, the
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university
could
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see
this as a chance to upgrade their courses to
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meet
with the new standard and demand of the
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labour
market.
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IELTS essay Some believe that it is good for a country’s culture to import films and TV programmes, while others think it is better for a country to have their own films and tv programmes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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