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Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. v. 2
The debate over a famous saying that "A student is only as good as its teacher", has been a matter of discussion among many. Critics argue that it has more to do with a student's attitude and inner capabilities, indeed, in my mind, I completely agree with this statement. In this essay, I shall analyse both points of view and outline benefits and drawbacks for each. On one hand, there are numerous predominant reasons why the success of a student corresponds to the quality of teaching. Firstly, some children suffers from underlying medical conditions that limits their rate of learning severely. In such a case it is the responsibility of the teacher to understand their needs and cooperate with these students. For example, a recent study conducted at Stanford University showed that only 25% of students who are suffering from some mental disorders were able to receive the type of education that they needed in schools or colleges. Secondly, as we live in a very fast pace world, where every year thousands of new technological advancements are made. It is now important more than ever for teachers to make sure that they stay up to date with this growth, because their lack of knowledge could gravely affect the quality of teaching that is being given to children. In stark contrast, it is also very critical for students to keep their a positive attitude towards learning what is being taught. As it is true that no matter how high the standards of teaching are it is fruitless if the learner is not paying any attention. Furthermore, a study done by Oxford University showed that students who did not concentrate in their classes are two fold more likely to fail in their career in the future, when compared to those who did well in class in terms of maintaining good attention. In conclusion, this is a topic which raises many questions in the contemporary life. From the given arguments and examples I am inclined to say that the success of a student in their career heavily relies on their personal look and interest towards studies.
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is
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. Critics argue that it has more to do with a student's attitude and inner capabilities,
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both points of view and outline benefits and drawbacks for each.

On one hand, there are numerous predominant reasons why the success of a
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student
corresponds to the quality of teaching.
Firstly
,
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children suffers from underlying medical conditions that limits their rate of learning
severely
. In such a case it is the responsibility of the teacher to understand their needs and cooperate with these
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students
.
For example
, a recent study conducted at Stanford University
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showed
that
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only
25% of
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students
who are suffering from
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mental disorders were able to receive the type of education that they needed in schools or colleges.
Secondly
, as we
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live
in a
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very
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pace world, where every year thousands of new technological advancements
are made
. It is
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now
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more than ever for teachers to
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sure that they stay up to date with this growth,
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affect the quality of teaching
that is
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to children.

In stark contrast, it is
also
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critical for
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students
to
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keep
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their
a
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attitude towards learning what is
being taught
. As it is true that no matter how high the standards of teaching are it is fruitless if the learner is not paying any attention.
Furthermore
, a study done by Oxford University
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showed
that
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students
who did not concentrate in their classes are
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more likely to fail in their career in the future, when compared to those who did well in
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class
in terms of maintaining
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good
attention.

In conclusion
, this is a topic which raises
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many
questions in the contemporary life. From the
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given
arguments and examples I
am inclined
to say that the success of a
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student
in their career
heavily
relies on their personal look and interest towards studies.
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IELTS essay Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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