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some believe smoking should ban in public give your opinion

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Even though smoking is harmful for human, number of people are smoking all over the world. However, smoking in public not only effect for smokers, but it also bad for those who around them. Therefore some believe smoking in public should banned. In my opinion, I strongly agree with that statement and I will discuss reasons for that in this essay Many scientists and research suggest and also have proved that Smoking causes for several deadly diseases in short terms and long term basis. smoke has lots of toxics ingredients, when smokers release that chemical substances to the air by smoking, those who around them will inhale that polluted air which known as passive smoking. As a result of this unfair situation, nonsmoker will have health problems for example, heart disease and lung cancer. On the other hand, smoking in public gives negative images to younger generation, as they have gravity to pick up bad habits easily. if any countries want get rid of cigarettes, the first step is to ban its public use. because at least that can prevent passive smoke simply. Furthermore, limiting smoking in public will also reduce the amount of cigarette that people consume for example, knowing that there is no places to smoke, smokers will not bring smokes when go out, that is the possible aspect that could be reach. To conclusion, smoking in public should restricted as it dangerous for those who surrounding by and by prohibiting it in public can prevent huge damages such as passive smoking, and the youth attention to it as. in my opinion smoking in public should banned completely.
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are
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all over the world.
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,
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in
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public
not
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effect
for smokers,
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bad
for those who around them.
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smoking
in
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public
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also
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causes for several deadly diseases in short terms and long term basis.
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smoke
has lots of toxics ingredients, when smokers release that chemical substances to the air by
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smoking
, those who around them will inhale that polluted air which known as passive
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smoking
.
As a result
of this unfair situation, nonsmoker will have health problems
for example
, heart disease and lung cancer.
On the other hand
,
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smoking
in
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public
gives
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negative
images to younger generation, as they have gravity to pick up
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bad
habits
easily
.
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if
any countries want
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get
rid of cigarettes, the
first
step is to ban its
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public
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Furthermore
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the amount of cigarette that
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, knowing that
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there is no places
to
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smoke
, smokers will not bring
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smokes
when go out,
that is
the possible aspect that could be reach.

To conclusion,
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smoking
in
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should
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for those who surrounding by and by prohibiting it in
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public
can
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huge damages such as passive
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smoking
, and the youth attention to it as. in my opinion
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smoking
in
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public
should
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banned
completely.

IELTS essay some believe smoking should ban in public give your opinion

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
5.0
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