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Some believe one government is better than national government. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

Some believe one government is better than national government. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. paerD
There have been suggestions historically for a single government that could control all nations. In my opinion, there are utopian benefits that would result from this, however, the drawbacks related to autonomy make it a negative theoretical proposal. Supporters argue a single government would be more effective and focused. This is best illustrated through major problems that all nations currently struggle to solve such as climate change and the recent health crisis facing the world. A single centralized government could better protect the environment by enacting strict legislation against the burning of fossil fuels and force all citizens to get vaccinated against corona. In purely hypothetical terms, such unilateral power could achieve tremendous ends. However, in reality, there is a strong likelihood that a government would either pursue different, less desirable goals or be unable to enforce their mandates. Beyond the infeasibility of such a world government, there are more basic reasons to oppose its existence. Variety in government is valuable in itself. Take for example the different governments currently in power around the world. Each country has, to varying degrees, chosen a government that represents their values and enacts laws based on the kind of nation they wish to have. The result is that some countries, such as those in Western Europe, lean more towards a socialist system that ensures a minimum standard of living for all citizens, others place greater emphasis on individual empowerment, others on transparency and still others on security over freedom. This diversity is a defining feature of human society. In conclusion, a single government for the entire planet could help resolve global issues but would ultimately limit the distinctiveness of each individual nation. Therefore, there are other solutions that should be undertaken to remedy the current crisis of confidence in government
There have been suggestions
historically
for a
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single
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that could control all
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nations
. In my opinion, there are utopian benefits that would result from this,
however
, the drawbacks related to autonomy
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make
it a
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negative
theoretical proposal.

Supporters argue a
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single
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government
would be more effective and focused. This is best illustrated through major problems that all
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nations
currently
struggle to solve such as climate
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change
and the recent health crisis facing the world. A
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single
centralized
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government
could better protect the environment by enacting strict legislation against the burning of fossil fuels and force all citizens to
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get
vaccinated against corona. In
purely
hypothetical terms, such unilateral power could achieve tremendous ends.
However
, in reality, there is a strong likelihood that a
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government
would either pursue
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different
, less desirable goals or be unable to enforce their mandates.

Beyond the
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infeasibility
of such a world
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government
, there are more basic reasons to oppose its existence. Variety in
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government
is valuable in itself. Take
for example
the
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different
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governments
currently
in power around the world. Each country has, to varying degrees, chosen a
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government
that represents their values and enacts laws based on the kind of
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nation
they wish to have. The result is that
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some
countries, such as those in Western Europe, lean more towards a socialist system that ensures a minimum standard of living for all citizens, others place greater emphasis on individual empowerment, others on transparency and
still
others on security over freedom. This diversity is a defining feature of human society.

In conclusion
, a
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single
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government
for the entire planet could
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help
resolve global issues
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but
would
ultimately
limit the distinctiveness of each individual
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nation
.
Therefore
, there are
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other
solutions that should be undertaken to remedy the
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current
crisis of confidence in
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government
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IELTS essay Some believe one government is better than national government. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

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