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Some believe cameras are benfiial whereas other believe it is threat for their freedom. Does advantages outweigh disadvantages

Some believe cameras are benfiial whereas other believe it is threat for their freedom. Does advantages outweigh disadvantages MoOA6
In various urban areas the application of video cameras in public areas has been inclined with the purpose of decreasing crimes but few people think that these measures can threaten one's freedom. This essay will discuss the advantages outshining disadvantages of the above statement. To commence with, there are enormous merits of using video cameras. First and foremost they reduce the crime rates. The cameras hanged on every public place can record any miss happening such as raping, robbery, hit and run case. Hence individual feared of being caught by police so they decline the violation of rules. Apart from this, they also increase the security of the public. Video cameras resist the entry of thieves, robbers as police provide information about the lawful wrong person to security guards who can easily detect the criminal entering public places. Furthermore, they also help to maintain past record for future reference. As there is no memory problem with these cameras one can check even the record of few monts ago to clarify their behalf. In addition to, they help in resolving enormous cases. The video cameras have helped in solving local cases such as theft as well as high court cases like rape case, bankrupt etcetera by providing evidence such as recording. For example, a recent study shows that in india 75% of the cases of robbery are solved with the help of video cameras. On the other hand, there are certain demerits of the video cameras. Predominantly, they can endanger one's privacy. As these cameras record every second of the day and each moment of an individual in a public place, in some way they are taking control over one's private life such that they can record with whom they are spending most of their time or about all the activities one performs in a day. Nextly, they also threaten the right to freedom. As the video cameras in the locality can easily access when a person is leaving home. Also there are certain things that are not socialy acceptable such as gay love, smoking etc. so they cannot do these type of things openly in public places. In conclusion, there are various pros of video camers but also its cons cannot be neglected.
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cameras
in
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areas has
been inclined
with the purpose of decreasing crimes
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but
few
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people
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think
that these measures can threaten one's freedom. This essay will discuss the advantages outshining disadvantages of the above statement.

To commence with, there are enormous merits of using
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video
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cameras
.
First
and foremost they
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reduce
the crime rates. The
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cameras
hanged on every
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public
place can
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record
any miss happening such as raping, robbery,
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hit and run
case.
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Hence
individual feared of
being caught
by police
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so
they decline the violation of
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rules
. Apart from this, they
also
increase the security of the
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public
.
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Video
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cameras
resist the entry of thieves, robbers as police provide information about the lawful
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wrong
person to security guards who can
easily
detect the criminal entering
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public
places.

Furthermore
, they
also
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help
to maintain past
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record
for future reference.
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As
there is no memory problem with these
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cameras
one can
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check
even the
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record
of few
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monts
ago to clarify their behalf.
In addition
to, they
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help
in resolving enormous cases. The
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video
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cameras
have
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helped
in solving local cases such as theft
as well
as high court cases like rape case, bankrupt etcetera by providing evidence such as recording.
For example
, a recent study
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shows
that in
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india
75% of the cases of robbery
are solved
with the
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help
of
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video
cameras.

On the other hand
, there are certain demerits of the
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video
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cameras
.
Predominantly
, they can endanger one's privacy. As these
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cameras
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record
every second of the day and each moment of an individual in a
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public
place, in
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some
way they are taking control over one's private life such that they can
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record
with whom they are spending most of their time or about all the activities one performs in a day.
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Nextly
, they
also
threaten the right to freedom. As the
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video
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cameras
in the locality can
easily
access when a person is leaving home.
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Also
there are certain things that are not
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socialy
acceptable such as gay
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love
, smoking etc.
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so
they cannot do these type of things
openly
in
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public
places.

In conclusion
, there are various pros of
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video
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camers
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but
also
its cons cannot
be neglected
.
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IELTS essay Some believe cameras are benfiial whereas other believe it is threat for their freedom. Does advantages outweigh disadvantages

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