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Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Kw71L
At present, along with some wild animals become extinct, it is raised by some people that it is not necessary to protect some of them cause by nature. Because it is the natural evolution and human should not put too much intervention. Admittedly, the earth would occur some changes in a period of time in order to fix some problems in nature with respect to animals. The reason might be that some species are too strong and nature must keep its equality. For instance, in the past, dinosaurs were extremely huge and bring too much threat to other animals. Strong body made them be the king of the earth, since no one can defeat them. In this case, other species could not even survive, and finally disappear from the land. Therefore, the reduction or extinction of this types of animals to keep the biological chain equal are necessary, for this action can protect other endangered animals to a large degree. To conclude, this is a situation in which human should not interfere. Nevertheless, human beings can provide assistance in some situations and prevent them from extinction, because we are the family in the globe and cannot bear to see any of them leave from our big home. Building reserves to prevent them from natural threat and keep them in a certain amount of number, especially the dodos cause by half nature and half human. As we all know, nowadays, the extinction of most species are caused by human activities, so we must response for our behaviors and try to compensate them. Hence, providing assistance to endangered animals are indispensable in some cases. From my personal perspective, i would obey the development of nature and advocate the people put less interference. Human are just a little sector in the globe; therefore, do not worry about too many things that we cannot control. But human can bring help to them when they in emergency, since this is also a kind of human compensation to animals and we do not want to see anyone of them leave along.
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wild
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become extinct, it
is raised
by
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people
that it is not necessary to protect
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some
of them cause by
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nature
.
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Because
it is the natural evolution and
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human
should not put too much intervention.

Admittedly
, the earth would occur
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some
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changes
in a period of time in order to
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fix
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some
problems in
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nature
with respect to
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animals
. The reason might be that
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some
species are too strong and
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nature
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must
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keep
its equality.
For instance
, in the past, dinosaurs were
extremely
huge and bring too much threat to other
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animals
. Strong body made them be the king of the earth, since no one can defeat them.
In this case
, other species could not even survive, and
finally
disappear from the land.
Therefore
, the reduction or extinction of
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this
types of
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animals
to
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keep
the biological chain equal are necessary, for this action can protect other endangered
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animals
to a large degree.
To conclude
, this is a situation in which
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human
should not interfere.

Nevertheless
,
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human
beings can provide assistance in
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some
situations and
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prevent
them from extinction,
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because
we are the family in the globe and cannot bear to
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see
any of them
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leave
from our
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big
home. Building reserves to
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prevent
them from natural threat and
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keep
them in a certain amount of number,
especially
the dodos cause by half
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nature
and half
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human
. As we all know, nowadays, the extinction of most species
are caused
by
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human
activities,
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so
we
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must
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response
for our behaviors and try to compensate them.
Hence
, providing assistance to endangered
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animals
are indispensable in
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some
cases.

From my personal perspective,
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i
would obey the development of
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nature
and advocate the
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people
put less interference.
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Human
are
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just
a
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little
sector in the globe;
therefore
, do not worry about too
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many
things that we cannot control.
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But
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human
can bring
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help
to them when they in emergency, since this is
also
a kind of
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human
compensation to
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animals and
we do not want to
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see
anyone of them
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leave
along.
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IELTS essay Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural processes. So, it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening.

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