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More and more people are travelling overseas. Do the advantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more people are travelling overseas. Do the advantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages? 6xPEK
Travelling abroad is one of the most desired dreams of workers. To relish a good drink by the shore just to relax or to visit museums and know other cultures have risen the number of overseas visitants. In this essay, I will outline the drawbacks of these activities and explain why I consider that tourism should be done carefully. To begin with, amid some of the arguments used to disqualify travelling for tourism purposes are the damage imposed directly to the environment. To illustrate this, one case in point would be the disappearance of the coral reef in Recife, Brazil, where the growing number of cars, buses and planes in the city has cooperated with the city's warming climate and, hence, the coral destruction. Although most individuals who decide to go on green adventure respect the rules of throwing rubbish only on a trash can, or not feeding wild animals with snacks, the increased human activity on that specific venue will lead to ecological impacts. Furthermore, another setback determined by more and more people flying overseas is the increase in the cost of living. For instance, to support this, one notable justification is the process of gentrification, classified as the moving of natives homelanders from the city centre to the suburbs. This process, well established and discussed by urbanists, essentially takes place in cities that the hotspots visiting by foreign people is firmly encouraged more than by non-international visiters. Thus, fuel, supermarkets and rent in those places are extortionate, since tourists do not eke out just to live a minger living as some inside citizens. To summarize, I do not believe that international travellers only bring joy and money to the country. Foreign tourism must not be always encouraged and the upsides do not outweigh the downsides.
Travelling abroad is one of the most desired dreams of workers. To relish a
good
drink by the shore
just
to relax or to visit museums and know other cultures have risen the number of overseas visitants. In this essay, I will outline the drawbacks of these activities and
explain
why I consider that tourism should
be done
carefully
.

To
begin
with, amid
some of the
arguments
used
to disqualify travelling for tourism purposes are the damage imposed
directly
to the environment. To illustrate this, one case in point would be the disappearance of the coral reef in Recife, Brazil, where the growing number of cars, buses and
planes
in the city has cooperated with the city's warming climate and,
hence
, the coral destruction. Although most individuals who decide to go on green adventure respect the
rules
of throwing rubbish
only
on a trash can, or not feeding wild animals with snacks, the increased human activity on that specific venue will lead to ecological impacts.

Furthermore
, another setback determined by more and more
people
flying overseas is the increase in the cost of living.
For instance
, to support this, one notable justification is the process of gentrification, classified as the moving of natives
homelanders
from the city
centre
to the suburbs. This process, well established and discussed by
urbanists
,
essentially
takes place in cities that the hotspots visiting by foreign
people
is
firmly
encouraged more than by non-international
visiters
.
Thus
, fuel, supermarkets and rent in those places are extortionate, since tourists do not eke out
just
to
live
a
minger
living as
some
inside citizens.

To summarize
, I do not believe that international
travellers
only
bring joy and money to the country. Foreign tourism
must
not be always encouraged and the upsides do not outweigh the downsides.
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IELTS essay More and more people are travelling overseas. Do the advantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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297 words
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