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galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.2

galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion. v. 2
History is part of paramount in every regions, then as the task of galleries should collect some evidences that is becoming inheritances. Some views said that museums must focus on the art or history from their own regions. It is controversial in because of some reasons. On the one of point of view, the function of galleries are place of heritage goods where each them have a trustworthy narrative and become a typical past event that presents values in society. while that collecting arts from the gifted artist that is giving the best impression in public and got a good judge, therefore this museum provided for the people who is looking for about the story of history. As result, to offer some information about it, the galleries should have many evidences are inheritances from that events or stories. In conclusion, more kinds of heritages is more knowledge which will offered to visitors even will increase the existential of museum or galleries. On the other side, each areas have typical story where they will introduce their own characteristic of culture, therefore too helpful as them if the contents of gallery is their from. There are some benefits kinds of museum is traditional. The first, values of culture that is showed there will growth the public interesting of this country while that, many appreciations that are given from some communities which will improve being of this area. In addition, this happen companies an advantage as society, especially in history subject is one of the main knowledge. To sum up, to know anything globally we must learn it from the basic. That is why, my opinion that the main education is history as if it is important to find out about it although is not our culture. I disagree with the statement said that should concentrate with our history because that is will limitation our knowledge.
History
is part of paramount in every
regions
, then as the task of
galleries
should collect
some
evidences
that is
becoming inheritances.
Some
views said that
museums
must
focus on the art or
history
from their
own
regions. It is controversial in
because
of
some
reasons.

On the one of point of view, the function of
galleries
are place of heritage
goods
where each them have a trustworthy narrative and become a typical past
event
that presents values in society.
while
that collecting arts from the gifted artist
that is
giving the best impression in public and
got
a
good
judge,
therefore
this
museum
provided for the
people
who
is
looking for about the story of
history
. As result, to offer
some
information about it, the
galleries
should have
many
evidences are inheritances from that
events
or stories.
In conclusion
, more kinds of heritages is more knowledge which will offered to visitors even will increase
the existential of
museum
or galleries.

On the other side, each
areas
have typical story where they will introduce their
own
characteristic of culture,
therefore
too helpful as them if the contents of
gallery
is their from. There are
some
benefits kinds of
museum
is traditional. The
first
, values of culture
that is
showed
there will growth the public interesting of this country while that,
many
appreciations that are
given
from
some
communities which will
improve
being of this area.
In addition
,
this happen
companies
an advantage as society,
especially
in
history
subject is one of the main knowledge.

To sum up, to know anything globally we
must
learn it from the basic.
That is
why, my opinion that the main education is
history
as if it is
important
to find out about it although is not our culture. I disagree with the statement said that should concentrate with our
history
because
that
is will
limitation our knowledge.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay galleries should concentrate on the history and art of their own country rather than the works of art of other parts of the world. with this opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
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