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Social Learning One way people learn is by watching the behavior of others Sometimes called social learning this type of learning involves the process of learning to copy or not copy the action of another By observing the results or consequences of anothe v.1

Social Learning One way people learn is by watching the behavior of others Sometimes called social learning this type of learning involves the process of learning to copy or not copy the action of another By observing the results or consequences of anothe v. 1
Over the years, human needs have become so overwhelming to the point that people are no longer conscious of the necessity of their natural environment. I strongly believe that technology has a big role to play in this and one way to reverse this trend is by inculcating more green activities. To begin with, people are no longer interested in the habitat of plants and animals again because technology has created a big distraction. In other words, as lives evolve, science has made it a must that new devices and tools are created to make people happy and comfortable. As a result of these new creations, humans are quick to forget about the trees in a garden or the animals in the zoo, but are more interested in unravelling the puzzles behind new devices and how to get on top of it. For example, there has been a big decline in the number of attendance to the zoo since the iPhone mobile released their latest range of devices in Nigeria. On the other hand, the government can create awareness programmes in order to sensitize the public about how important their surrounding vegetation is. They can create programmes such as "Green Evolution", in order to inculcate the habit of planting a tree in their homes and surroundings. For example, after the Lagos State Governor made it a law that every house must plant a tree in their homes, there was a tremendous change as people were more sensitive to different plants in their suburbs. In conclusion, while technical innovations have blindsided people about the need to appreciate their surroundings, I believe that the most suitable way to reverse this trend is by encouraging more planting by citizens.
Over the years, human needs have become
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overwhelming to the point that
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people
are no longer conscious of the necessity of their natural environment. I
strongly
believe that technology has a
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big
role to play in this and one way to reverse this trend is by inculcating more green activities.

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with,
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people
are no longer interested in the habitat of plants and animals again
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because
technology has created a
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big
distraction.
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, as
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lives
evolve, science has made it a
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must
that new devices and tools
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make
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people
happy and comfortable.
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of these new creations, humans are quick to forget about the trees in a garden or the animals in the zoo,
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are more interested in
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unravelling
the puzzles behind new devices and how to
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get
on top of it.
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, there has been a
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big
decline in the number of attendance to the zoo since the iPhone mobile released their latest range of devices in Nigeria.

On the other hand
, the
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government
can create awareness
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programmes
in order to sensitize the public about how
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important
their surrounding vegetation is. They can create
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Green Evolution
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, in order to inculcate the habit of planting a tree in their homes and surroundings.
For example
, after the Lagos State Governor made it a law that every
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house
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must
plant a tree in their homes, there was a tremendous
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change
as
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people
were more sensitive to
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different
plants in their suburbs.

In conclusion
, while technical innovations have blindsided
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people
about the need to appreciate their surroundings, I believe that the most suitable way to reverse this trend is by encouraging more planting by citizens.
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IELTS essay Social Learning One way people learn is by watching the behavior of others Sometimes called social learning this type of learning involves the process of learning to copy or not copy the action of another By observing the results or consequences of anothe v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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