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Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. ymNg
In the present world smoking has become the most common cause of diseases & mortality. With regards to the health of population, government must restrict the use of tobacco smoking and its other forms to the population. In my opinion, banning tobacco products will be helpful in achieving better health outcomes globally. Here I will discuss my viewpoint in detail. Now a days Majority of the diseases related to cardiovascular system and respiratory system are caused mostly due to cigarette smoking. People who do not smoke, are prone to catch debilitating diseases being a passive smoker. Moreover, Teenagers are of the view that replacing your cigarette with a hookah, cigar or pipe might lessen the negative health effects of tobacco and thus they are increasing its consumption. Public health care workers must acknowledge government about the surge in use of tobacco with time. Additionally they should create awareness by the help of campaigns. advertisments & posters. On the other hand, its government duty to prohibit smoking at public level also penalize people for breaking the laws. Furthermore, they should increase the taxes applied to such products, and make it less accessible to the population by reducing the outsource. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it mostly depends on government to manage this issue with stringent guidelines. Besides taking the help of health care promoters to assist them in this concern, which will not only help the lessen the consumption, but changing the attitude of people towards this habit is equally important
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has become the most common cause of diseases & mortality.
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tobacco
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smoking
and its other forms to the population. In my opinion, banning
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tobacco
products will be helpful in achieving better
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health
outcomes globally. Here I will discuss my viewpoint in detail.

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Now
a days Majority of the diseases related to cardiovascular system and respiratory system
are caused
mostly
due to cigarette
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smoking
.
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People
who do not smoke, are prone to catch debilitating diseases being a passive smoker.
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Teenagers
are of the view that replacing your cigarette with a hookah, cigar or pipe might lessen the
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health
effects of
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tobacco
and
thus
they are increasing its consumption.

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health
care workers
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government
about the surge in
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tobacco
with time.
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advertisments
& posters.
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duty to prohibit
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smoking
at public level
also
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people
for breaking the laws.
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, they should increase the taxes applied to such products, and
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make
it less accessible to the population by reducing
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In conclusion
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strongly
believe that it
mostly
depends on
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government
to manage this issue with stringent guidelines.
Besides
taking the
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help
of
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health
care promoters to assist them in this concern, which will not
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only
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help
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the consumption,
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changing the attitude of
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towards this habit is
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important
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IELTS essay Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
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